by EndlessSilk
I'll admit that chapter one kind of felt like a one shot that went of half cocked. It just seemed like a lot of "go with it" explanations and a sex scene. That being said I find chapter 2 infinitely more stimulating. Not only does it's very existence prove it to be more than a one shot, but then you went and added hints that previous characters wont be thrown aside. Not to mention the end bit with charlie talking about how there are more of them, or the repeated mention of angels. If you do intend to bring a few supernatural elements in, good for you, if not then oh well. Either way this is shaping up to be quite intriguing.
Like the first commenter said the first story had me. This chapter brought me in. Still kind of confused as to mind control, not sci-fi. But keep it up.