All Comments on 'The T-Shirt Chronicles - Pt. 02'
by LT56linebacker
- 24 Comments
Demosthenes384bc8 months agoI know it's fiction, but Texas is a one-party consent state, so the video is admissible and the whole legal angle collapses. Another miss is he works in the same office as Janice for a while but never connects they went to school together, then suddenly he's thinking of why he never noticed her. We need at least a sentence or two of how his blinds were removed. Other than that, entertaining read - peace out! 3.7*
dob0920958 months agoGreat story. Loved the continuation. But I’ve never heard your Santa joke before. The joke alone is worth a 5.
Tx77Tumbleweed8 months ago5 stars, only I see possibilities for at least two more parts here, one being the legal battles/retaliation story and the other a new office romance.
olddave518 months agoI don't want to be demanding ......... BUT get us more parts right away!!!
Great story 5 stars
Anonymous8 months ago10 stars, keep her going. The slut and her asswipe father, don't have their just due yet, and Jan hasn't showed Dan what a wife and mother is. When she gets Dan, she'll probably get even with his ex-whore for hurting her husband,and father to her kids! Please write another part, it isn't done yet!! Good job, Bear!
tizwicky8 months agoGreat story I can't wait for the conclusion. Lot's of revenge to be had in future chapters.
DaveK78 months agowho is Francine? (I think you got Janice's name wrong a couple of times).
LT56linebacker8 months agoAuthoralright, alright, I missed once. It should be Janice. Even Mrs. Bear is in stitches about this. SHE never makes a mistake. Me? Not so much. I apologize. So far two people have called me out on it. I don't intentionally make these mistakes. Those who read my stories know I have enough trouble doing it right. No Easter eggs, so to speak. Again, sorry. As I tell my wife, 'Shoot me, please. Put me out of my misery.'
The BEAR
SplitGeode668 months agoGreat story can't wait for more. One minor point. The phrase is et al., not et all. The al. is an abbreviation for alia, meaning others.
WhoGivesAShit2 months agoSo far I like it. Despite Daniel being gutted by his ex, it’s a fun scenario. When they asked Janice to leave the room, I half expected that 2 Marines and a Seal were about to discuss a covert operation for physical revenge against the ex’s father. Now I’m wondering what they’ll do with the depositions, how public it may get. The only thing that could be better, is if ex’s father was Mayor.
Anonymous2 months agoCan't wait to see those assholes get roasted. Daniel finally woke u and he'll find himself a wife, a REAL wife. He doesn't know it, but her name is Mrs. Janice, and she'll proudly have another name, too, MOMMY, the mother of his children...
RanDog0252 months agoThe story is turning out pretty good but I hate short stories. I guess I could combine them all in Text Aloud and listen to them. My favorite Authors stories are normally 23 - 27 pages and sometimes over 30 to 37 pages. I'm just not used to synopsis length stories! The writing and story however are worthy of 5 stars. Thanks!
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