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All Comments on 'The Tease'

by neutrona

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DWornockDWornockover 12 years ago
Too short

However, it was erotic so I rated it 4 stars.

Scotsman69Scotsman69over 12 years ago
As usual

his cock is rock hard. Why don't more Lit authors use a bit of imagination... and a thesaurus?

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
stopped after 1st sentence

OK, I lied, I read the 1st paragraph.

"Michelle and Brian had been dating a few months and we really enjoying each other".

Decide upon which voice you want to use, then stick with it. Recommend that you get an editor, who would have caught that you missed "were" "we really WERE enjoying each other.

neutronaneutronaover 12 years agoAuthor
agreed

I agree that this type of mistake is annoying. Hopefully it was the only one in the text. Sorry I missed it.

thanks for the feedback all!

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