All Comments on 'The Tingle Date'

"Her hopes were not high, but you never know, maybe a daring web would spit up an interesting male after all." What us that sentence supposed to say? It makes no sense.

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Review writing and punctuation basics, like what a sentence is and how to write dialogue.

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Women don't refer to applying lotion or cream as creaming themselves. That's just bizarre and awkward.

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I couldn't read past that. Far too many run-on sentences and the lack of punctuation makes it difficult to read and caused me to lose my interest in the story almost immediately.