All Comments on 'The Ultimate Christmas Gift'

Not bad, just spoilt by appalling spelling.

Thank you for your efforts is writing and publishing your story. Sorry but you really need an editor to help with spelling and grammar. It is a "silly" story SillyKinma

Great story

Don’t let the others tell you it is not.

Your writing is good.

Swedish to English needs some help.

More please

Could not get past the first paragraph. If you want votes you should at least proof read what you have written.

Please please get an editor. The misuse of words almost drove me to exit the story. Great plot but atrocious command of the English language.

Great !!!! Story was great for a new author, keep up the good work,. Hope to read more of your work.

Yummy, absolutely great. I look forward to more stories.

There are way too many contradictory statements. The kids will wait till after Christmas, but they don't. The mom is wearing a dress and the daughter takes off her mom's jeans, etc., etc., etc.

That was painful. The first half page was anyway. I can't speak to the rest of it, but I can't imagine that you learned grammar, spelling, punctuation, and vocabulary after that.

Even after having learned all that, I can't fathom that you could come up with an entertaining story. What I read of this had about as much imagination and creativity as an empty saltine cracker package.

Unless you enjoy poor ratings and negative comments, you'd probably be much happier just reading the stories here.

THIS was Delicious & HOT, Thank you!

More...

Please.

Yeah, maybe do another editing pass or two.

Some parts are a little rough, and the ending was a little rushed. but the desire and need they all felt for each other came through! Keep at it, dont be discouraged. I'd love to read more from you in the future

I enjoyed the story, english is a hard language and you did quite well for a first time. Take no notice of comments about the grammar and punctuation, most english speaking people make errors as well, usually the the people complaining can only speak their local dialect and are unable to accept any other communication.

Is English your second language ? You need to get someone to help. Good story, if that is your picture then great rack!

HAWT! I loved it.