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by JustNAuthorForFun

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

I felt like you overused "~", and switched a bit much between first and third person. But overall it was a good story. Thanks for writing it!

JustNAuthorForFunJustNAuthorForFunabout 1 year agoAuthor

I honestly agree about the overuse now that I've read back through it. The main reason I used it so much is because it doesn't look anything like it does on literotica, I'll probably remove them now to be honest. And sorry about switching between 1st and 3rd alot, I had some trouble settling for whether to do it all in first or third person, so it ended up being what it is now. And thank YOU for the criticism and the kind words!

texlootexlooabout 1 month ago

This was a fu. Read!

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