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Click here"Stosh! Yes! Oh my God yes!"
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Anonymousover 3 years agoI enjoyed the premise, honestly I thought it was adorable.
The issues I have with it is mainly pacing and building the environment.
Mostly it didn't have a lot of depth, their interactions felt shallow because they weren't really described to the readers. While you don't have to go overboard with the descriptors some are nice, describe how she's smiling, or how their sitting, more about the apartment or more details about their interactions.
I think the overall story you've thought of is good, it just went from 0-100 really fast without really know how it got there.
Anonymousabout 4 years agoit was just interesting enough to read the whole first part, but not enough to read other parts. i'd suggest having someone read it before posting it, not enough meat to the sotry. even for a sex one. keep trying tho!!
Anonymousover 4 years agoIt does have interesting loose ends for another chapter
Why isn’t she scared?
what does she really want? Eternal life?
Is she just an 18 year old homeless kid
Is she really a vampire hunter?
Were her parents killed by a Vampire?
Each of these could be a chapter
djb
JosephineKuoover 4 years agoAuthorThis is my first story for Literotica, and there will be more. This is the first entry.
I got the abbreviation of Stosh from Stanislaw from my father-in-law, whose name is spelled differently from my protagonist. Stosh is originally from Poland, but, as far as I know, he isn't a vampire.
