All Comments on 'The Waitress'

Thank you for sharing it here. I have loved your work and look forward to your next story. Thanks.

Crikey - I blinked and they were married.

Wonderful story overall. Ending is a bit overdone and please get someone to proofread. Pronouns.

Tears in my eyes at the end of this one!

Definitely romantic. But as others pointed out an editor could help you polish the story. Some parts had an awkward structure that made it jarring to read in spots. However you do have potential, keep at it.

Really sweet and romantic, fits the category perfectly. Maybe you could make your stories longer. Enjoyed reading it.

This was a story that just popped into my head, got written, and submitted. I agree with the comments that I should have reviewed it little more thoroughly and perhaps have it more involved, a little longer. Thank you for your feedback and comments, they're always appreciated.

Perfect and beautiful

Can't beat a good romance story and you nailed it.

Thank you

Schmaltzy, but nice.

You could do with a careful read-through before submitting, too. Several instances of missing words, eg: "Molly opened the just..."

This story is unfinished.

It needs at least one more chapter.

Thanks for a good story, imaginative and well written.

A real loving romance. What more could you want from life? So there's the odd error but the story telling more than makes up for it.

A good story but lots of missing pieces in the abrupt end!! Also, he wasn't sure if he was winning the Pullitzer while he was heading to NY for the new job so the letter Tim says something else

A very touching story. Well done!!