All Comments on 'The Warlock Pt. 02'

take the time needed to do the job YOU want. Don't worry about the readers. Speaking for myself, I would rather wait for a complete thought, a full episode than get dribs and drabs. It can be frustrating for a reader to have to go back and reread the previous submittal for the new one to make sense and have continuity.

thanks for writing.

Granted, there is definitely such a thing as "too long of a chapter" (and that is of course based on personal preference), but seeing as how so far you've done 'only' 1.5-2 pages, I don't think you're in any danger of reaching the 'length tolerance' so to speak, of your readers.

(I know mine is upwards of 60 pages on Lit. Yes, there are people who just put up an entire Novella in one submission. Took me a few days to get through the last one of those I read.)

I look forward to the next chapter.

I'm not an English teacher or a grammar Nazi, so no complaints from me on format and such, I am enjoying your story - for me that's the bottom line. Keep writing, and I will keep reading. Nicely done!

Feels as if I'm just getting into the story and it's already over. Longer allows you to explore your topic in greater depth. If the submissions are too short, it's not worth reading the series until several are waiting. Otherwise it loses impact.

I'd say, double the current length and the intervals between, that would keep you on your current pace, and keep us fed enough, I would think.

Writing is a creative process, so be creative. Format, context, syntax, grammar, and even spelling are toys to be manipulated at will so that you may communicate your story whole (message, intention, emotion, etc.). Take all the time you need. There are stories on this site that writers have taken years between postings and I am addicted to reading them. So write a good story and write it because you enjoy it and you are doing for yourself. You will still have your fans waiting breathlessly for your next submission.

I can't wait for more. The erotic part is nice but i guess there will be more in the next chapters. The intriguing part is the story itself. I like it very much! Keep on writing.

You wanted feedback and advice? You got it. And as a reference, when your readers are not only reading your story, but the comments about your stories. You've got it in the bag.

I think your writing style is fine. You should publish at whatever pace suits you best. Longer installments may allow you the luxury of making necessary changes before you post, if you change your mind.

I think you have a good subject, and it seems well written, so far. My only hope is that you don't get tired of the story and leave us hanging! I hate to start reading a good story, and find it was never completed!

is a rare gift and don't think for a moment that us aficionados don't appreciate it, "to the max"

5* only because that's the max...*giggle* sometimes I slay myself muhahahahaha

Seriously though, your work is top drawer stuff!

You're doing fine. Good flow unmarred by typos, compelling story, interesting characters, and an idea where this story is going. Don't rush it. We'll wait.

Go at whatever pace you like.

I'm partial to the chapter headings as this let's me know when to change gears or if/when to expect a time jump in the story, but that is a minor convenience.

Story is well written and engaging, hope you stick with it.

I'm enjoying it as it is, looking forward to more.

3 pages plus is a nicer bite. Good work.

Great character development. Your writing has improved quickly as well. The first part of CH 1 was a little rough, but you've smoothed out in CH 2. I'm really enjoying the plot. Please keep writing.

A wizard's magic is actually purely based on science, so really when throwing a fireball, some form of flammable substances would be used in the process, not "the earth's innate magical energy called ley." A wizard's magic has nothing at all to do with religion, so they wouldn't be using "ley". But at least you didn't do like other stupid story writers and get things completely wrong by saying wizards need to say some "magic words" or "chants" to cast spells. And that wizards use curses. XD It makes perfect sense for a warlock, but for a wizard? People should be laughed at if they are that stupid. I'm looking at you Harry Potter! >_>

I agree with a few people. While I like longer chapters I also like reading often. I think you should just do whatever pace you are comfortable with.

Overall I like how the story is going and appreciate the chapter headings.

I have read most of the sci fi and non human stories (at least the ones that were more than 1 chapter) and have to say you are up on the higher levels for your writing in comparison to the other writers so keep it up. :).

Thank you for a great read and I look forward to reading more.

And write how YOU want to write, not how I want to read. Although the length is working well for me, it's not the main point. You tell a good story, please keep it up

Truly enjoying your story. Cannot wait to see where you take this.

Love the story so far.

For guidance, check these out:

God of Mischief and Lies

https://www.literotica.com/s/god-of-mischief-and-lies

Necromancer Chronicles

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1485790&page=submissions

Path of the Necromancer

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1415717&page=submissions

Surfacing

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=257531&page=submissions

Celestial Wars

https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1516702&page=submissions

Frankyl its good the way your going

the only critique I would give is that the character depth needs ot be added, there isn't anything on any of the people other than chloe, its good because its fast paced and got a lot of variables at the moment but that will dry up without something to anchor it to

JC

as each chap gets a vote, i think 2-3 pages is a minimum to vote on.

I liked the reference you made to lawyers...

I've met a few jackass members of the legal profession and agree with the link to the Infernal Plane.

Cant help much with it. You have a good story going, I love the tie in to Nasty Lawyers, I've Seen that in the world and you nailed it. The Demon is a bit odd in that she loves the sex but would kill him. I can see where that works but a bit of detail as JC suggested would help it. I noticed you mentioned a circle for teleporting, more detail like this will fill in gaps in his abilities. I like the death ward on her room, That was a good detail. Mentioning others needed to help with the things he is not good at was excellent. No-one is all powerful or all knowing.

Please continue and don't quit until the story is wrapped up. I really hate it when a story is well along and dies.

Ramjet

I love your style, great story and love the flow.

You give good antihero. Please do continue.

To start a story 2 to 4 pages.

After the first three or four installments 4 to 7 pages.

Then end with a 10 page finale.

And invest in about 2 or three editors for guidance.

I can't wait to see what comes next, so I'm not going to. See you in Part 3.

Thank you.

Amazing

Very cool!

Getting better and better. Thanks