All Comments on 'The Waxing Scene'

I'm sorry but you have to be pretty lazy not to think up names for your characters. How do you expect your reader to get "into" the story and care for these characters?

Even if the story is just stroke material and nothing but sex the reader likes to think that PEOPLE are doing these things. A B and C are not people.

U get a D. Ur story = boring.

0 names

0 character descriptions

0 dialogue

0 author imagination

0 reader interest

Would provide more feedback but 2 lazy.

The idea that someone could get off on something as such...hot hot hot

you are most welcome. d went much farther after our scene. i will miss you when i move away. thanks for the story.

I think you might have made a mistake with the letter people. Ann, Bev, Cris, Dee or anything but the letters, which gave the story all the warmth of a clinical research report. Then again, it's your story, but it did have promise.

at least you didnt follow it up with a sequel.....Put tool A into hole b