All Comments on 'The Way You Hold Me Ch. 02'

This could have been a four maybe even a five, but it was in serious need of editing. Also if you want to jump from character perspective to character perspective put in a break or use a different font for each. As it is it is just too confusing to read.

this story is far too rushed, although the plot line is good. can't seem to keep up with he story

Wow. So far this is way too much like the The Way You Say My Name by Sara Bell (wavyscribe) that it could almost be mistaken for plagiarism.