All Comments on 'The Weekend Pt. 01'

I am continuing it. I normally don't submit stories until it is fully finished, but work got in the way. I am submitting it tonight, so it should be published in about 3 days. Sorry for the delay.

On a side note, low scores shouldn't run any author off. I am a little strange, but if I write a story that only gets good comments, I feel that I have failed. I enjoy stories than have realistic shades of grey. If everyone likes it, then I feel it is too black and white. No grey. Conflicting ideas are what make the world go round. If two people always agree, one of them is redundant.

Once again, thanks to all who read and commented. Please, never stop criticizing stories. No story or author should be above criticism.

I thought the emotional kinetic motion was excellent. And I was very struck by characters who can't say what they want to say and end up having to say something else, something that does no good. People are like this a lot, in my experience - more mixed they want to be themselves. It's good to see some non-cardboard cutout psychologies (eternally wonderful husband, selfish completely unperceptive wife seem to be such boring favorites). As FD45 said, way better than the average score. And my score was way higher than the average score.

. . . getting as much hatred as I sometimes do. I know it’ll roll right off his back.

A point to LSD for knowing who Dave Concepcion is!

I hadn’t read javmor’s previous article, so I didn’t know that Brian was a recurring character. Yeah, he was used in this story, but he seems more of a minor protagonist than Regina and Lee. Two wrongs don’t make a right, but they can pave the way for a reconciliation. Regina had allowed Lee’s previous affair to eat at her, and couldn’t discuss it. Maybe now she can.

Don’t know where this story is going, but that is a sign of good writing: the ending hasn’t been telegraphed.

First, I felt angry, gripped, totally unhappy. I just don't see a happy ending here.

Second, I read nearly all the comments, a rarity for me. There's some good ones, but sad to say this was one of those times, no disrespect to anyone who wrote something, that I would have liked to have heard from Ohio or HDK. I'm going back. Maybe there's a Richard Gerald, a Black and Rand, or an Unoriginalist I overlooked. I need something.

Alas, I'll follow along, but I'm not a happy camper.

Is this a five? Of course it's five.

Jedd Clampett

Well done. Realistic. Well written, and thought provoking.

You have created a villain in Brian only equaled by one Nageren created in one of his stories in my opinion, In addition,the husband and wife are finding out that revenge does not give one satisfaction. People like Brian, both male and female are there to sense unhappiness and seize upon it . I hope you finish Brian off this time. And by the way, this is a HECK of a story! many thanks!

The points of view are.

One man's trash really is another man's treasure.

jav has written some stories I dislike but he writes well enough to plant the hook and I wind up staying for the ride.

I hate cuck and whore stories but can admit when one is well written.

I am a fan of Shakespeare because he wrote stories about people doing shitty things and making shitty decisions with real repercussions.

jav has a touch of that and I am usually always willing to ride with him to the conclusion.

The journey is important to me and jav makes it interesting.

I don't know enough about Lee to be more than disappointed he cheated. Regina is an extremely flawed character that I don't exactly like but really find interesting. She really does love Lee as pathetically stupid as she has become for screwing a coworker that apparently porks anything with a slit.

I abhore Brian. Regardless of if his character is growing, he is still fucking married women and my limit for him was reached in "Love at first sight theory".

My only pleasure that could ever occur reading about Brian would be if he met someone wired like me. Someone who would smile kindly at him as I snapped his bones.

Even though this author, in all probability, won't do to Brian what I would, I'm still down for this excellent, emotionally charged writing.

This is fun for me and I am enjoying the ride.

that's what she needs after he screwed up, time to move on.

"cuck in a closet"

Who knew?

The comment section was more exciting and revealing than the story. lsd also known as...well why repeated all those monikers 90 per cent of commenters have for him-lsd needs a mental health intervention. Denigrating Kimi1990 in a most sexist and offensive manner, insulting Blackrandall neither of which posted.

Reedrichards applauds him for knowing who Dave Conception is though lsd just used his name with no biographical reference. I admit I was shocked that lsd and rr knew about my neighbor. How a small businessman from Redland became so famous. His little store between 2nd and 3rd street did not seem to generate that much business. Perhaps he has a new Internet presence. I will have to inquire when next I visit his store.

Last javmor left him in innocent texts he had been badly beaten and WAS NEVER THE SAME!

Too bad javmor decided to let him play his games again

Waiting for the next chapters

You commented that "(the number of) comments don't mean sh*t".

To a nameless, vocabulary-challenged, gutless, unidentifiable, inexpressive parasite like you, I'm sure " good sh*t" is the highest compliment you're capable of. Too bad, despite your preoccupation with sh*t, your lack of analytical skills keeps you from perceiving the differences between dog sh*t, chicken sh*t, pigeon sh*t, rat sh*t or your own sh*t.

EVERY named commenter deserves more respect than you do as an Anonymous sh*t-slinger, and Javmor's worst story is more worthy of my time than your best comment.

If you care at all about being credible (that means "being believable"), go back and count the comments that are part of the silly argument that I agree has inflated the number. Subtract that number from the total. You will still have a high number, and they will represent a large variety of viewpoints on Javmor's story. That means the story is provocative; in other words, good, but not satisfying.

Scores? That's the only thing YOU influence, so their accuracy really is sh*t.

Of course, I'm counting on you to have the maturity to understand there are more viewpoints than just yours. Am I wasting my time here?

Of course I am. If you cared about being credible, you wouldn't be Anonny.

Javmor, looking forward to seeing where these guys go from here. Thanks for the story.

The best short story I have read in a long time. It is well-planned out and written with real life consequences.

gr8gy2lv

Let the story continue. *****

The revenge fuck doesn’t work . Now how do you stay married if you both choose to when you work with the guy who fucked you all weekend even though your married. I know if it was I the revenge fuck would never work . She would’ve come home to complete destruction.

cuck in a closet. Your comment doesn't make logical sense plus you are a coward for taking anon potshots. If you must take anon potshots, please try to be original.

Five stars. Can’t wait to hear the details of his dalliance.

Stories about infidelity in marriage and as a reaction revenge sex, are always fascinating when written by a good author (like javmor), because there's so much potential for emotional conflict and angst. Revenge sex is a need for balancing the scales (unless it is only an excuse for a little strange) but the thing is, perfect balancing is impossible because the whole concept is asymmetrical. The spouse who cheated first destroyed the marriage's past ,demonstrating all was not well, while the other spouce thought so. The spouse who uses revenge sex destroys the marriage's future with an infidelity that can be remembered fondly and cherished in the years to come, since it is "justified" and even"therapeutic", unlike the first offender's cheating, which is just a painful reminder of the start of the crisis. So, there are so many and interesting ways such a story can evolve and javmor is more than able to see it through.

One gives the other a reacharound as he reads these stories

More like this please

About 80% of the people read stories watch movies such methods they put their imagine into the story plot. Where the the readers do not find any positive hero or character in the story according to their taste they will push the 1*.

If the readers met several such stories without positive characters they will push the 1* without reading the story at all!

The 20% of the people can read stories and watch movies according to the writer's skill or the skill of the movie makers......

80% of our brain is built in this way, somebody from the 20% of people SHOULD UNDERSTAND this phenomenon!

Well written. No doubt. Unfortunately, the story makes me uncomfortable. As someone mentioned his actions destroyed the past. Her actions destroyed the future. Love, trust, understanding, caring et all are destroyed. It would have been more humane to just divorce him. She has destroyed all hope of a loving marriage. Each share the blame, but what they had will never return.

Hey Jav,

Thanks for the story! Solid writing, lots of emotional tension and dealing with a tough situation like cheating and revenge sex? Love it! Always interested in stories that intelligently delve into truly fucked up situations. I'm not sure about the intellectual debate but this chapter made me think which is why I'm drawn to these types of stories.

Revenge sex is so fascinating! It's like doing surgery with a chainsaw! A great way to kill the patient (relationship) but if it survives it carries huge scars. Really looking forward to the next chapter.

Killian

Starting good.

Reminds me of a Slirpuff story.

DAMN, everything New reminds me of something old😣.

Thanks for the chapter, Javmor 79.

AMerryman

Where’s the next chapter??

However, the cold calculated deliberate way she did this was way out of line. I presume he at least tried to hide his affair but this was something else. I am usually in favour of reconciliation but not this time.

Pity she will probably end up with the true man of her dreams and live happily ever after. I just hope not.

5*

My reaction is that if one asks the other to forgive them that will start a chain reaction that just might lead to RAAC,

like anon 2/28 is writing his own stroke stories now.

Wow! A LW story with real emotions.

Is that your problem solving?? Get even by cheating like the husband?? You poor little sucker!!!

Could not be I told myself when I realized you had resurrected that arrogant, heartless predator.

Before you add chapter 3 you might want to refresh your memory about Brian character.

Sorry, no one like that ever changes and wants ''just to be understood''.

Nor would he ever be the genuine shoulder to lean on and confide in.

That problem arises when you pull characters out of otherseries and shoehorn them in new series.

You lose credibility as author in changing complete nnarcissist...cannot be done.

Sociopaths and psychopaths cannot be rehabbed

you anony you retarded asshole

"Pot meet Kettle!"

Assuming your to stupid or ignorant to understand the hypocrisy of your moronic comment an explanation of "this" metaphor can be "Googled" .... anony!

So many comments. It was unbelievable, but then this site is for fiction about unbelievable incredible sex. The bf even had to have a big dick, of course he did. Why would a moronic woman have sex with a small or normal dick. She was in denial, just not sure if in the sudan or egypt end.

Keeping that in mind, there is a problem in this story. In ITM, which occurs BEFORE “Weekend”, Brian has SHIT beat out of him by an irate husband. There was intimation that Brian “... wasn’t quite the same...”. Which I took for mild PTSD, and at least hesitating going after married women.

Here he is with Regina, a married woman, and he knows the husband knows. And there is not an hint that he has any thoughts of retaliation by Lee.

I see either Path A.) This loss of caution can be explained by Brian being in love Regina, so would go through anything to be with her. Or Path B.) Regina made Lee out to be a wimpy sissy boy who she could control (though that is probably unlikely as she started telling Brian her woes early on and, probably, wouldn’t disparage Lee in that manner. So Path B is possible, but unlikely.)

If Path A, then everything they do and say together has to take that into account. He’s not “playing”. This is his first time in adult love. You hate him, ‘cause fucking up Regina and Lee’s marriage. But you have to sympathize with him a little too.

That’s my take on things.

Path C. ) Brian has gotten over any fear of irrate husbands beating on him because he got a CCW permit. Which the local police department gladly gave him after the beating, and because nurses, male and female, are friendly with the police as they interact all the time.

good story about a marriage on life support that needs the plug pulled. OK, he f'ed up. OTOH, she f'ed up with malice and planning. He should spend his time focusing on another woman.

Due to your resent posting in this series l decided to start form the beginning again, all I would like to say is that l think this is probably the best opening chapters to a storyline that l have read att LW. Well done!

Thanks again

Some details of Lee's 'indiscretion' might round this story off a little. Cheating is ALWAYS cheating but a planned weekend to revenge fuck is malicious. Although the opening paragraphs were enticing,some context of Lee's cheating would help to flesh-out the place these tormented minds were inhabiting. As it stands it was, at best, an OK 3*

jusr get a divorce and avoid the drama. She hates him, whether or not she has cause. time to move on.

if he cheated first then it's all right. but what about divorcing the asshole instead?

Powerfull first chapter, I really needed to understand whys she was doing that to a husband she loves enough to mention while with her lover. So here it is the elephant in the room, I like the passin in here. By the way is nice to have a Brian that still the same but more mature, there is a decerning change in him.

When did 2 wrongs ever make a right. Her only correct choices were forgive or leave. She made a bad choice but she couldn't help it. She's a women so she drops an IQ point every month.

Both very hateful characters.

Why would I read on?

He fucked up, so she fucked up even more... two wrongs, etc.

So, why would we care about this if the characters are so reprehensible?

I just can't be bothered

Not sure why in your stories the asshole is usually in the military. You must hate the military, cause speaking from experience people in the military are usually touchy about stuff like cheaters. You don't have to look far in the military to find someone that was dear john'ed on deployment. If he is lucky, he survives it. It does take your edge off when your half way suicidal in a very dangerious situation. Or better yet, you come home, after deployment, and you find the bank accounts empty, and a divorce and restraining order waiting for you. Oh to add insult to injury, the military jag will often take the wifey side, so much for sticking up for their own.

Both obviously made mistakes but Brian is a douchbag predator and should be dealt with as harshly as possible!

5. Great series

He fucked up. But she did it for revenge. Protect assets and move on. Why is he still talking?

I've learned that judging a story before the ending can often require a reversal of the first when you get to the last.

I think its in the book of Galations.. NOT sure.... you will reap what you sow !!!

What a fucking slimy whore.

Second time through.

Well you opened the story with a coup de grâce. One that se knew she was doing and chose to do. From the looks of it, it is going to take you five more chapters of hell for them to call it quits. But, I'll press on hoping it will be different. I'm a bit masochastic that way. (Grin)

Good start

2 stars - not a great start.

Both main characters are not very likeable.

Lee is a wuss. Too one dimensional.

And he is still married to this disgusting cunt because..................?

Very strongly written, they both fucked around. But there likely is one huge difference: he cheated but he didn't rub her nose in it. Wife's cheating was meant to inflict maximum pain and damage to husband. Infidelity is awful; infidelity coupled with wanton cruelty is unforgivable. There really is no coming back from that, in my view. But I have a bad feeling about where this ultimately ends up.

P.S. Brian should be erased from the Earth. He is an unadulterated piece of shit.

He wounded the marriage. She just killed it and put it out of its misery.

Totally agreeing with what one of the Anonymous peeps said. Brian is a piece of shit.

Sad tale, well told.

This is an all to familiar troupe, husband cheated? Yeah, but not maliciously. This cunt didn't want to get even, she wanted more than what she deserved. Thr correct thing for Lee to do is disappear. But we already know this is a insipid RAAC tale....

Wow, I can almost see this happening. It seems so real. Don't have any information on Lee's lover, but this Brian guy is a problem that will always be there for 8 hours each day. She doesn't want Brian. There is no love and there is no future with him, and she has no problem with that. Brian, however, may not go quietly.

Obviously, unfinished.

Two wrongs are double trouble.

Payback? No

Just adding to the misery.

USMC Vietnam

Greatest respect for corpsmen. He denigrating them

This series is outstanding.

Loosing the moral high ground didn't make us even. It just showed I didn't love her enough to forgive.

Never, ever, give up the high ground.

I commented on giving up the high ground in my previous post.

I Usually don't have time for multiple chapters stories.

You hooked me with excellent writing skills and foresight to keep the story going. I'm betting that Brian character will destroy a few more marriages before he finally changes. Hell, seems like he'd steal his half sister from her husband just to put another notch in his belt.

I digress. Had to come back and thank you for writing this story. 6 outa 5.

mmmmm makes a good story, just that bit different

Nope

stopped reading when it was brought up that they both cheated. :( don't want to read about two people who would be better off apart.

What a piece of work

5* for your writing, Good tight stuff conveying the damage of cheating. Two broken hearts. The old adage “Two wrongs don’t make a right” would appear to be apt to your story concept. Seems its going to be a long one .. reconciliation in this circumstance may not be for the best. The damage (in her case, rooted in revenge / getting even) will haunt the pair forever. Hopeless, move on.

What Lee did by cheating was wrong.

She had a choice. Stay and work it out or leave.

There wasn't an option 3 (Stay and cheat yourself)

Good start to the story!

Going to read a bit more, but i dont have much confidence of it getting any better, at the moment its 1 star