by MILF4black
The ending made NO sense what so ever. Duplication of the first part of the story was not needed nor wanted. This is NOT a good story.
ShadowRosie please write the stories you like yourself instead of just writing mean comments to others.
Beginning with hot sex to get our attention is generally a great device and sucked me in - literally - here. The description of the backgrounds was well-written and very interesting but a bit on the long side relative to what was revealed. On the other hand, nothing further on the sex than where we began made the first chapter seem too short.
AM I correct in assuming that a new chapter will be here soon? I hope because I've now invested my valuable time in the characters. The title and the author's name suggest it will be hot and steamy soon. You have me intrigued. I'll be back,