All Comments on 'The Winning Bet'

Good story, but minor errors take away from it. A second set of eyes would make a very nice effort even better.

If I was write, well things were going to move very fast. - right

Between the two of us we scoped her up - scooped

she deep-throated him with long stroked of her mouth - strokes

We let lose then - loose

We lifted her from the couch and laid (-lay) her on the floor, both of us laying (lying) down

get and editor. these stupid mistakes spoil what could have been good

Thanks for the feedback. I agree. Typos and grammatical errors definitely detract from the flow of the story. My apologies!