All Comments on 'The World Beyond The Fog Pt. 01'

A promising beginning, although I found your style of writing a little "clunky", so to speak. Keep at it... you've got a good story started here. I wish I knew enough about English to perhaps offer some tips but I'm sure you'll figure it out. Just make sure to keep writing! 4/5*

Fenris420, thank you for the first review. Yes, English is not my native language, although the end result was not as bad as I expected. To tell the truth, I came up with the entire plot of this story last year, I even have an ending. I just had to dare to write it. By the way, only now I realized that in the first part there is not even a hint of what will happen next, which is why someone will be in for an unpleasant surprise.

I think you've got an interesting idea going and I'm looking forward to more.

It was really good. Hope you continue the story. Maybe johnny transforms into a werewolf by Emma