All Comments on 'The Wrong Way Road Trip Pt. 01'

Sierra Sprite

Your writing is delicious and your characters are tasty.

Please keep feeding us bears.

Be well,

FDD

Fantastic. Kept me engaged from the beginning.

I love reading your stories... thanks,

I'm waiting for the next chapter with as much patience as I can muster... but that isn't a whole lot!

the lack of backstory, the poor pacing, the numerous names for the same two characters, and the clumsy nearly nonexistant scene transitions make this tough to read.

Quite delightfully playful, looking forward to where this is going.

If my story is popular enough to be trolled, I should be pleased?

Thanks to my loyal readers for fine comments. Part 2 just went to press!

especially when there apparently isn't a budget constraining it.

I am really enjoying the way you built the characters

What a neat story. I look for stories that are interesting and different. Not just the blah blah kind of story that can be found on this website. I like the characters and the premise of the story. I like the direction and possibilities. I will continue to chapter 2. Thanks for your time and imagination.

The person above has some valid points. You shouldn't just dismiss them. I would take their criticism as a way to improve your writing. The pacing is strange and the characters have multiple names for the same people. that is confusing. Not a bad story, just needs some tweaking.

I'm sorry Sprite, I think you got drunk on Romance writing this. It was so sickening sweet, and unrealistic by mid page two, I had to quit. Don't think I'll read the other chapters.

And well worth 5*s from me.

However, considering what she had just been through she was remarkably trusting very quickly.

Keep them coming

Phil

Such a fine story I have stumbled upon!! I found your stories as I was looking through new postings and saw how high all of your ratings were and thought let me give this a quick try. I am thoroughly enjoying the story the characters and your writing style. As I read the writing moves very quickly it is very clear what your intentions are the play between the characters is in my opinion very real.

A fun read so far. Realistic - no. Still a hoot.