by jman_bigdaddy
Great idea for a story, and great execution. The ending wasn't what I expected. I did get suspicious as soon as he described the socks and underwear.
I feel sorry for the bot lady, he might have had a good life with her if he hadn't gotten greedy.
I guess it's all about the saying: If it appears to be too good to be true, it probably is.
I liked the premise. The nano nonsense could have been avoided completely since he got a new phone. I'm not into pantyhose so that made no sense to me, to each their own.
It was pretty good.... Instructions went on foreveeeeer.... Then u fucked the whole thing in the ass at the end.
I never got the obsession with prostitution and mind control. If I have the power to alter peoples minds, I don't need to prostitute women to make money, or to sell them into bondage.
When it comes to women, even imaginary fantasy women, I don't like to share my damn toys. If I have the means to turn a woman into my plaything, then my own personal fantasy is to keep her as my own personal plaything.
If you want to take your story in this direction, that is fine, but pimping and incestuous sex seem to be the most common male fantasies in erotic literature, and the two least appealing to me.
Acceptable writing & a decent premise cut short by an unnecessary twist. Better luck next time.
I know you put a lot of effort into writing this, but... it's just plain bad.