All Comments on 'Things She Overheard'

It was too clinical. By the time you got past the long, boring setup to the brief portion that was actually erotic, it was too late to save it.

Ending was too rushed with both sets of daughters

It was decent but felt a little more rushed than some of your other longer ones. I think it would be better if you focused solely on one couple in a story from beginning to end. Sure, you can add in a little side-story stuff, but don't split the focus too much. Make it clear it's primarily about one and take it nice and slow.

I absolutely loved your story, your attention to detail is excellent, the banter between couples, fathers and daughters is great, your writing is wonderful, I hope you have many many more stories to tell, thank you.

Sort of fizzled out at the end.