by Dinsmore
What makes this story to good? It is so wonderful it has to be a fantasy. 5
I only gave you a 4 because I felt you rushed the epilogue. Why not have them deal with wild sex while Jackie is pregnant?
You'd need to do a re-write because the ending is nailed shut. It might be worthwhile, up to you.
Good job, just don't be in such a hurry to close out a story.
I don't set up an account because I'm up to here in userid's and pw's. When I do truly care, I give my name.
All the best to you Dinsmore,
Paul
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The only thing really wrong with this story is in the very first paragraph. Any good music lover knows it wasn't the Eagles that did "Third Rate Romance," but the Amazing Rhythm Aces, a really fine country-rock band of the 70s.
This story epitomizes the best of literotica, at least for me.
Hope and passion and Hot Sex can be possible.
Self destruction for what? Pissing on each other - how warm - did they do it in each other mouths?
Why would you ruin a perfectly neat tale with pissing? One handing it again eh.
With much less regard
This was the nicest story I have ever read on Literotica, and I've read a lot of very nice ones! Outstanding in every way!
Two Dinsmore stories in one day. Very nice; lots of good sex in this one.