by jadewinchester
glowing eyes, fangs this belongs in the NONHUMAN or SCI-FI areas not here. stop posting trash in the incest area we already have enough bad writers we don't need stories that belong in other catagories.
WTF is this? Vampires? Who the heck knows? I hope you're not wanting to make a living from writing.
A very quick surrender by the girl and done without much thought. I suppose vampires already have broken the taboo part. Her seeming penchant for sex to stave off the bite reveals the girl has knowledge. Try getting an editor and flesh out the idea on the page already. I didn't like this very well; then again, this is an outline for a story. Read the help for authors and seriously, find an editor.
RS
Regardless of whether it should be in Sci fy or horror, I loved it! Quick and powerful and so very hot!
It was a little rocky at the start and I wish the story followed the characters. Very descriptive and sexy make out scene though, you definitely captured the passion.