All Comments on 'Thirty-Year-Old Virgin Sister'

Pure shit. Pick a tense and stay with it. You were all over the place.

the other comment was too harsh. an enjoyable story.

But honestly, how many stories are perfect. You have real story telling skills. Be sure to keep writing.

The story was great - What annoys me is people who criticize stories but fail to put their name to it.

Peter

Thank god, someone wrote about love (and sex). In my book they are the same. Loveless sex IS a sin because it is selfish and little is shared!

Keep writing, mate. You have broken the "script for a porn movie" scenario, so common amongst so many writers in Literotica.com

Thought it moved a little too fast. Bounced a bit.

Not happy about Cheryl having a baby. A rule was broken.