by theaquarianpen
I don't know if I read your stories in the order they were posted or not, but I think I did. Glad to see you're working with an editor who can help clean issues, but stay true to YOUR vision of the story, even if that means the comments are harsh!
The premise of the story was OK, but the poor grammar, punctuation and spelling were major distractions. Also, the eroticism was sadly lacking.
For all authors a suggestion don't label your story ch 1 and then take weeks, months, or longer between chapters if at any are ever written. Far too many stories on the site are begun with chapter 1 but there's never any more chapters written.
I like short and sweet the editors don't and sometimes I get sloppy with my punctuation But those of you who have read my other stuff already know that. I plan to follow it with Christine which I have already written years ago as a hobby before I discovered Lit dirty mind you know. But I'll have to clean it up first.