All Comments on 'Those Eyes Ch. 01'

Very good start to this story and with all good stories it leaves you waiting patiently for the next part. You have talent and the knack of moving the story on at just the right pace. Too many people on here are just looking for that wham bam but for me you can’t beat a story that sets the scene properly and creates real people and real emotions. Keep it up

Excellent start!!! Very good build up to future episodes.

Very good start, simple, feel real

I agree with Falling4U - good start on what has the makings of a good story

What a great first entry. I’m anxiously awaiting the next chapter.

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Make that 3 followers

Love it! Can't wait for the next chapters!

Very well written!

OK, I'm in! Nice characters, plausible story, intriguing cliffhanger, sure this is your first time?

Now that's what I'm talking about

You did a great job connecting Mary Beths eyes with her emotions. Not an easy thing to accomplish. I’m also looking forward to the next installment.

Yes, what the others have said. Well written, even clever (e.g., your aside about the champagne bottle) and creative first installment. As an eyes—and-smile man, I’m hooked on Scott’s sensitivity (apparently shared by Mary Beth) to the many emotions that eyes can convey. Great, great opening chapter BU85 👍

I hope your opening apologetic remarks were coy because they were totally unwarranted. "Good story teller" goes without saying. A real (master) craftsman for sure. I hope you write "for real" for a living because you may be wasting your time doing anything otherwise! (Hedge fund manager with seven figure income will erase my comment, however.) Great job!