by BluePossession
If he’s so successful, why is he living in a piece of shit neighbourhood? Lets be honest, if her husband was so incompetent that being a janitor was the only job he could keep, then its not like they’re living in a mansion.
So why isn’t this 27 year old CEO of a successful company, that has its own maintenance department, living in a better house than the lowest paid janitor in his successful company.
Outstanding!
It was confusing and frustrating how much of idiot the main character is, but it ended up making for some interesting twists. His tech buddy growing such an indignant conscious was odd as well, what did he think Tom was going to do once he was Jessica. But then Tom deduced he was angling for the foot job.
As for the Whackadoodle's comment it's stated that he is the CEO of a startup, so he probably still has all his money tied up in growing the business. Again running his own company it seemed unlikely the way he got dumber once he was her. Not sure if the author is implying women's brain capacity is smaller, or just Jessica's, she did agree to this having any expectation that he would keep her hands to himself. But it made for funner romp, especially with Natalie.
Thanks and keep it up.
Pls do more possession stories, big fan of mind control and possession stories.
Great story concept, I like the crazy revenge aspect, and then he gets dominated.
BUT, please proof read. the names kept flipping around, Mariah became Natalie, at times you had Jessica saying Mariah's lines, The daughter went from Jackie to Jessica back to Jackie. And Tom was speaking some of John's lines when the machine was first set up. I had to keep checking that I was keeping al the characters straight.
But please keep writing, just get a proofreader/editor.
Thanks