All Comments on 'Three Days in Breck'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Dull

Poorly written. Lost interest in the first three paragraphs.

JustplainjeffJustplainjeffover 3 years ago

Please let me know where I can buy my wife some 'booby sox'?

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago

FYI, “fuck me” isn’t foreplay or a lead in to a story, even if it’s a continuation of a previous story.

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Formatting

You really, really need some work on how to format

cageysea9725cageysea9725over 3 years ago

This story is amazing.

It's amazing how bad it is.

It might have been (hardly) slightly better, if I didn't have to give up trying to figure out who the 'we' in the first paragraph, and pretend that didn't exist before moving on.

Just a hint, when that happens, you suck as a writer.

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

No plot at all. Just sex.

BilleyedBilleyedover 2 years ago

His wife came home and found what looked like a raisin laying on top of the covers of their bed.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Better than the Jillian fucking which made him a manwhore.

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