All Comments on 'Three Square Meals Ch. 072'

Valaden women get tumors by their 50th birthday, a bit earlier (as in Tashana's case) if they are stressed enough, ... But besides the advanced brain tumor, Tashana has a host of physical / sexually based damages, badly healed old wounds and had her face carved up by a sadist, ... if only she knew she could trust John to heal her completely, the brain tumor included but, mental instability, right? ... So, 13 nightmare years for the poor girl, but now she is safe, if only she believed it, ... a very good chapter, made me think, ... (ouch!) ... ;-) ttfn

I think Dana truly enjoys her 'researching' of Progenitor schematics with John's help, ... Too bad they didn't just slip the 1st cum load into Tashana while she was first unconscious in the Medical Bay, it would have helped everyone, ... and she would've awakened healed and no longer bothered (mentally unstable) by her brain tumor, ... ;-) ttfn

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"You're the one that stuffed them into my noggin."

Tashana, brave, terrorized. tortured, cruelly mutilated, and not trusting this 'good' Progenitor because she knows better, ... this is a tragedy of epic proportions, .... almost a comedy, ... well, it will all work out in the end, ... and her cleansing fire will eventually be made of use supporting John and his girls, ... ;-) TTFN

Tashana's going to escape.

The way Tashana has Pyrokinesis she would be a person to be afraid of.

So if Tashana joins up then I suppose the Enchu are then going on the hit list? They hurt a crew member and they are slavers and rapists and murders, so the Enschu are ticking all the boxes.

Tashana has been betrayed and tortured, raped and expecting death at any moment plus everything else for 13 years. All that was done with no safety net ensuring death wouldn’t happen. Sure the Malari girls are normally wiped and such but they know they won’t generally be killed, especially if they are royalty like Illrith.

So I fully believe Tashana deserves revenge. But she doesn’t get it, not even close. Illrith isn’t a different girl now and she is responsible, directly responsible. Illrith has the same memories and everything the only difference is her thought processes make her react differently now. It’s like a cunt child rapist that goes and finds “god “. We don’t let him out of jail do we? Just because of god, do we. He’s the same person and he has to atone for his crimes just like Illrith. Eradale is different, she was basically killed and a new person was put in her body but she kept the old persons memories.

Give Tashana time, and treat her softly, ... Saved from the Enshunu and Hades' pirates and mercs in the Underworld, ... junior Asshats all, ... Well from my perspective of having read and reread this tale a few times, I can say, ... ***SPOILER ALERT*** that it has to be this way, with all the mistakes, and lost opportunities. It all works out in the end, after some thrilling, nail-biting times, ... it's worth it, enjoy your read! ;-) TTFN

I noticed some readers whining about the fight. I think the author did well here. Sometimes the heroes smash goblins. Not all the enemies are dragons. There are weak and strong. What annoys me is the hero is adle-minded. Tashana is emotionally broken. She is as mad as Mad Claw. She is full of hate, bitterness, and fear - rightfully so as the author described well. She is also physically broken with a lot of problems including terminal brain cancer. She also showed that she is dangerous, a regular Stephen King Firestarter. So, what is his solution? Put her in medbay; leave her largely alone and unsupervised. She is dangerous and dying. He should have taken an active hand in smoothing this problem over with all-curing 'cum'. As the author has detailed exhaustively, sometimes the greatest kindness is compassionate healing - what he has done with all of his thralls. The hero is of two minds so often. How can a house divided stand?

I enjoy the story but the qttqck on the Underworld was in perception quit macho .

In all previous fights there was danger but not in this fight.

just gets better and better!

Well, they thought about giving Faye a physical body,.. now why won't they put their big brains to the idea of getting Faye a back up system,.. cause if she goes down,.. they can't use that written over 'hacking deck' to bring her back,.. her 'magical' progenitor server is great,.. but what if it gets zapped,.. no back up, no reboot, and no Faye! ;-l TTFN

Why did they heal the six girls the way they did? Now is the secret out and it will spread quickly….stupid!!!!

John was pulled from both the astral plane and the cyber realm, instant crash to the titanium decking,.. Again the flooring is mentioned to be titanium,.. as it has been mentioned on other T-Fed origin ships. With the singular exception of steel decking in Dana's Engineering Bay, formerly the ship's Armory, all references what the crew walks on has been titanium,.. in the here and now titanium is much more expensive than steel or aircraft aluminum. Now titanium may be a lot cheaper to turn into armor plating in the 28th century,.. but except for the Hanger deck, and maybe the Cargo deck,.. titanium strength for the floor is simply not necessary; Maybe one of those corrupt Admirals that the Lion and Alyssa forced out were getting some titanium kick-back credits,.. any ship that replaced most of their flooring/decking with lighter weight aluminum would move/accelerate noticeably better,.. turn quicker too! Please have Dana point this out to Charles sometime,.. and change to Invictus decking material to lighter stuff at their next refit, like using Maliri crystal it's 6 times stronger that titanium and much lighter too! (Tefler has said so)., but maybe -- "Tefler titanium, tuff as old boots",.. maybe it's our author that is getting the titanium credits under the table, For shame! ;-) TTFN

Are we ever going to hear about Tanya again?

Tashana is twice as bad as Irillith was before joining the crew.

Looking like a horror movie now.

As good as this part coming up is I hate it because it hurts my heart. But this story is indescribably beautiful to me, moreso on my 3rd read through. Tefler thank you for this masterpiece.

was wondering when you would get around to the idea of faye having a physical body, the thought crossed my mind like 10 chapters ago

My only real complaint is just that, fairly often, I have to reread a sentence or a paragraph sometimes to figure out who is talking or thinking something. It's just something that slows up the wonderful erotic sci fi adventure in Tefler's intergalactic 28th century, but that's not too bad a thing, I need to slow down and just enjoy!

Is that an Arthur C Clarke reference (Venus Prime) or a Star Trek reference (Harcourt what have you been up to?)

Just can not have that, Here is a comment: story gets only more enjoyable in a reread.

You've done amazing work with this story. In this chapter, I really liked how the Underworld tech, and by extension, the Archonis(?) race weren't derived from progenitor tech. It makes the universe feel so much bigger when not everything was created by one race, even if they were the dominant force in that sector for only-you-knows how long and its cool to see some seeds for just that being planted now. Thanks for all your hard work. You're a cool person.

Thank you.

Clearly addicted, reading this brings on a serious case of procrastination on all other things I should be doing. Bit of a glitch in enjoyment with the aside on putting down peace movements but loving the delicious food! Where do they get all the great fresh ingredients?

Re: Tefler Re: Anon "I'm a man"

Okay, that was funny. Especially the part where you remind Anon that this is erotic fiction, and that logic does not get priority seating.

You forgot to mention that with Anon's high standards, they should quit reading erotic fiction, seeing as how I can find no reason for it's exclusion from any top list.

..... on this or most any other site. There are some really great stories and talented authors published on this site. But, believe none are as addictive as this one to its readers. After over 70 chapters, each of the main characters are like endeared friends.

I still say this have to be turned into a movie or series somehow.

Too bad I caught up on the chapters as I cannot wait for the new ones to come out.

I started reading your story about two weeks ago. I really liked the way you introduced a lot of new technology and the way you weaved intrigue into the various chapters. Some times the sex has been a little too much and has overshadowed the Story. All was going great until I reached Chapter 72 and the story had to be temporarily put on hold. Unfortunately, this causes me to loose track of the storyline and I'm hard pressed to pick it back up. Beyond that I've really enjoyed what has been written. I will stop back in six months or so and check on your progress. Keep up the great work.

I can't tell if you're trolling, or being sincere. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt just to be nice:

"John apologizes to Alyssa for being a man "

No. He's worried about his Progenitor side coming out, and enslaving those women. Don't you remember what happened last time Progenitor-John took control? Alyssa basically calms him down and says, "Hey don't worry about it. Any normal guy wants to screw pretty girls."

"stripping the Invictus of security on the long range scanners"

No, Jade was watching the Bridge.

"she lies about fucking the ai."

No. She was just been playful, she wasn't trying to conceal anything from him.

"she just got the ai's cherry"

No. She had a bit of girl-on-girl fun with Faye. John thinks that kind of thing doesn't count as "getting Faye's cherry".

"she wants details of John's tryst with the Maliri women and seems jealous"

No. She can't be jealous. It turns her on watching him with new girls, and she asked if she can be there for the next ones.

"Alyssa seems to have sexy with whoever the hell she wants to... but John, not so much"

No. They both have free reign with all the girls on the crew. She gives him carte blanche to fuck any girl he likes, and she'd never look at another guy twice. He's got a pretty phenomenal deal!

"Alyssa comes ripping in there getting in his business, rather than letting them have their first time alone"

She's always welcome in any encounter. Both John and Sakura enjoyed her appearance.

"On a side note"

That was pretty weird. You want me to get in a barfight because you don't understand the characters or motivations in a piece of erotic fiction?

Yeah, I guess you were just trolling. Well done for getting me to bite.

Tefler

Let's see, John apologizes to Alyssa for being a man and THINKING about sex with six women whom I don't understand why they're even onboard, except for that. They are later returned to Federation space with full knowledge of the progenitor "gift" intact, great opsec there. Next John gets cock-blocked by his progenitor half, while Alyssa has a ball with all 12 AI avatars, stripping the Invictus of security on the long range scanners, the internal security and the psychopathic psychic in the medical bay, and the six women on deck four that no one really knows. When Alyssa comes back from her orgy, she lies about fucking the ai. John is dazed and on the floor, but she blows it off with, "oh, you were in good hands." Uh, yeah, she just got the ai's cherry and fucked John over. Alyssa sends Jade to move John's cum from her pussy to her stomach, regardless of where John might like it to be.Later she wants details of John's tryst with the Maliri women and seems jealous that she missed out on getting to watch. Is this part of the plot, or is Alyssa going to keep John's balls in her coat pocket for the rest of the story? Alyssa seems to have sexy with whoever the hell she wants to, when she wants to, without John's knowledge, but John, not so much. Take for example Sakura's first anal with John, Alyssa comes ripping in there getting in his business, rather than letting them have their first time alone, wtf dude? 21st century reverse double standard anyone? Is John or Alyssa the protagonist of this story? You write these chapters in 10 days, right? Maybe next chapter take 12 and get the balls on the right character. For a change. On a side note, if you want to know how a marine would respond to a given situation, find yourself a bar, out on the edge of town, it'll have pick-up trucks in the parking lot, no Hillary bumper stickers on any of them, but several like "keep honking, I'm reloading", walk into the bar, the guy you're looking for is staring at you, with his back to the wall and able to see the door easily, he will probably dismiss you as a non-threat rather quickly, observe him, once he settles down, he'll stare into the distance, it's called the thousand yard stare. This is your marine, walk up to him, poke him in the chest with your index finger with each word as you say "apologize for being a man." Helpful hint: when you look on a barroom floor for your teeth, look for the wet ones, they're fresh, and all the teeth on a barroom floor may not be yours. Cheers!

great writing as always,your story is very good. time from last one to new is some time and hard to take, but is small price to get best work I have read .THANK YOU Zeke7474

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I'm going away for a few weeks without internet access. So I thought this would be a good time for me to make predictions so I can rank myself out of my total number of predictions how many I got right. To raise the stakes, I'm going to include the number in my literotica name when I create an account!

Here we go! (haven't read 73)

-John's final words this chapter will be taken literally In the next.

-Dana's breakthrough is about the progenitor ship she saw.

-she will discover why that ship can travel so fast.

-Tefler will tell us what Dana discovered in the first page of the next chapter because he's not sadistic like other authors.

-Tashana will remove that thing from her neck

-Tashana will escape the ship

-when she finds out that the entire maliri is allied with John, she feels cornered

-when the wild Tashana is cornered, she often bites. Hard. With LOTS of fire.

-she actually puts up a good fight, considering what she's up against.

-Tashana's conflict with the Invictus crew is solved when Alyssa shows her memories of the crew.

-Alyssa gets her first thrall. Could be Faye, since cyberspace is not really John's thing. Or Tashana. Or some random maliri male.

-Tashana will become Alyssa's first matriarch.

-we find out whether males can become thralls.

-Tashana covers scars from self surgery using mask.

-Tashana attacks relatives.

-John proposes to sakura.

-IF the history of the progenitors are revealed, then my theory will be right.

-the monster from the astral plane will be a concern again.

-underworld is a giant space ship.

-Dana gets to work when they get to maliri territory.

-Tashana uses her powers when she climaxes.

-Rachel gets around to the scar cream.

-orphan project will be in the plot again.

-John is going to be a continuing political tool for the crew among the maliri.

-Dana gets new powers unique to her(extra points for electricity control)

-Rachel disease project will reveal more secrets.

-Tashana agrees to join the crew on the condition that they allow her to take precautions against progenitor John(immobilization device, change the bond so that John must follow the commands for his matriarchs)

See you in a while!

I submitted chapter 73 to literotica yesterday, so it'll probanly be up here by about Tuesday.

Chapter 74 is nearly done, just working on the last part now. Allowing a few days for editing, it'll probably be up on my site by Friday!

Tefler

Any update on ch73 tefler ?????

When are we gonna be able to read it on literotica

Tashana will probably go underground on planet Valaden after meeting with and seeing how Edraele has become a thrall too. Her taking out the implant kinda points to this direction. Alyssa really jinxed the recruitment process by building the extra console before Tashana joined the crew.

I'm getting withdrawal symptoms waiting for the next chapter. What's the status on that, can any patreon tell me if Tefler mentioned anything on that site?

Timbo:

Let's hope it doesn't come to that; John is somewhat handicapped by his, "If I haven't seen it done, I can't do it" mentality. Even when he and the girls were facing the Big Nasty in its pocket universe, he conjured a sword --something he was familiar with -- rather than the thousand other more effective weapons he could have created. I'm assuming PJ will be under no such restriction.

Against that argument, John did create a wall of force when he was sparring a hyperspeed Sakura, so perhaps he's beginning to instinctively access some other applications. PJ used more or less that same technique when he was going after the Glowing Queen. Maybe there's some bleed-through beginning?

If Tefler does take the fight to the Astral, it will be veeery interesting to see how it plays out.

Your story should be books, movies, TV shows! Blows all the others away. A story worthy of awards! So good

It feels to me as though it will have to be something like an astral plane encounter. Either on that plane, or perhaps in the related planes where he goes for his 'nightmares.'

Perhaps the terrifying denizens of that place may get in on the fight as well. Could be a very tense time........

Timbo

Wow! Good Catch! Yeah, I have a feeling the showdown between John and PJ is coming up soon.

... that Alyssa and Athena are now communicating??

Alyssa met his searching gaze, and replied, "It was one of Athena's tricks, she guided me through it."

What happens if her integration as a Progenitor is complete before John's?

John better step up his game, is all I'm sayin'.

I hope we will be able to read ch73 by Tuesday tefler

Well unknown user its called time management. Best story i have read on this sight so far keep up the good work

The tumor revelation was certainly a good one for that. Mine was her utter rejection of what Faye was telling her. As a free AI construct, given a life, given free will, given the ability to grow, new servers to support it all, and her personality....went right past her. And it shouldn't have. The rejection of the AI Vambrace was the first time she realized she had lost Irillith and Irillith has gone way past acceptance now...to no avail.

Get help. Please. You don't have to live with all that hate, dude(ette).

Why are you hiding behind anonymous. If you have guts then post here comments using your literotica user name. If you not afraid our community then f___er show your face.

Your right he had 4 or 5 girls and 1 of them plotted something and paid the price for it going wrong but my point about noblewomen still stands all those engineers were over 90 years old and his girls were 50 or under mind if the males went to the border stations about 500 years ago, things have been going down hill since then

but Ceraden in their early meeting mentions having several daughters,one of whom hasn't survived

Someone please tell me when the next part is coming . I'm dying of suspense here. xD PLEASE PLEASE AUTHOR POST QUICKLY :)

A-pilot-D

No as before john only noblewomen were able to have kids

anyone had the idea that one of the named engineers will be one of Ceraden's daughters?

Tas goes supernova and kills everyone at station end of story ?

Enough distraction for me.

Story comments are more fun.

Tashana being so overwhelmed that finding out she also has a fatal brain tumour hardly rates more than a minutes worth of worry was one of my favourite tells on how freaked out she is.

What scenes gave you a visceral reaction?

I thought the Maliri population was societal not genetic. Not saying the change wont happen, but they need to fix the society as well as the genetics. I grant that they are trying change the society but not sure if they are addressing the problems of make female segregation. In fact John's Genetic fix might slow down the population explosion because there will be fewer females to give birth. I do wonder what percent of the male population will be progenitors if any.

ohhh maybe Tashana could Kidnap John and separate him from the girls. Take the raptor and attempt to strand him on a planet to separate him from the girls by sabotaging the ship and its communicator to allow everyone to shake off his "evil" influence. And maybe while she is alone with him on the ship. she will succumb to her genetic programming. Then John could contact Alyssa via telepathy for a rescue.

of housekeeping that's just struck me.

How are they doing for ammunition for the mass drivers? can they make it themselves? or do they have to buy it and are they getting close to running out?

"Just wanted to say thanks Tef! You and yours here have now made 3SM's a $ instead of great story."

Ok...I will bite: Just exactly how does making money on a story not make it great? ESPECIALLY when you still get it for free? I am thinking you only CAN make money on a story IF it is GREAT...ESPECIALLY when one can get it for free! So: I am confused.

"Don't disagree but since your ways seem to want to spoil it all for those NON payin' types, I get it... "

You mean mentioning it is up on Patreon is a spoiler? Okay...I am thinking you do not know the definition of spoiler. Merriam Webster defines a spoiler as: "information about the plot of a motion picture or TV program that can spoil a viewer's sense of surprise or suspense; also : a person who discloses such information."

And mentioning the chapter is up on Patreon does not fit that definition. What I see happening with you is you are not dealing very well with your frustrations due to your self-imposed anticipation for the next chapter specifically BECAUSE you recognize it is a great story.

"Keep up the great work your doing, but not a 5 from here on out. (and I'll be going back to vote accordingly for all other stories!)"

Ahhh. And now I know who you are. The name changes and the anon posts cannot hide you because your vitriole smells the same every time. And each time I will kindly and earnestly suggest you seek professional help. You don't have to live with such hate in your heart. You really don't.

And quit bringing down the GREAT works of others with the BS others postings/votes!!!!

I am very positive I have not seen this on 3SM comments...except for your post here I guess...;-) The ONLY mention of anything REMOTELY like what you are suggesting is some of us have noticed a change in the voting habits based upon the new standard Tefler has established. But absolutely NO ONE is promoting that. And such comments do not constitute talking down any other's works as no single persons or groups are identified. It is just a general observation of how voting has changed on the site. In fact, on Patreon, there is a thread on other authors that is PROMOTING their work...OOPS! sorry, I souldn't have burst your bubble there. :-( .

This actually sounds more like someone dealing rather poorly with their sense of anticipation and expressing their frustrations through smoke and mirror complaints. Perhaps some introspection is due?

I check the comments quite regularly, and I think there's only been one case of someone posting a spoiler in the past. BruceWo's comment doesn't give anything away. :-)

There's no real difference in my posting rate on here before/after I set up Patreon. I submit the stories as soon as they've been fully edited, just as I always have done. Patrons get to see each chapter about a week earlier because:

1) I post a chapter there as soon as all the new content edits are finished. The final grammar/punctuation pass takes a while at the end.

2) It takes a minimum of two days for a new chapter to be moderated for literotica before it goes live.

As to why I don't just publish it here and then submit an edited version again when that's done, the reason is that "Edited" versions take at least two weeks to be moderated! I get emails letting me know about grammar/punctuation issues from helpful readers, and it's a waste of everyone's time putting something live with problems in it.

Tefler

Correct me if I'm wrong, but Patreon users posting spoilers doesnt seem to be a huge issue for this story. Despite what the title of BruceWo's comment may suggest, there isn't really anything spoilery in it, as it just lists a bunch of unanswered questions that most readers have likely already come up with and didn't expect to be addressed in the next chapter anyway. Other than that, there doesn't seem to be anything else in these comments that would be an issue. The only spoiler I remember seeing was posted in the comments of Chapter 70 and it was promptly removed anyway, so I don't see why getting angry with Tefler over this is in any way justified.

While many are eager for each new instalment of 3SM, we are really quite lucky compared to fans of most other stories on Literotica. Teffler writes at a very fast pace considering this is still his side gig. Furthermore, while editing affects the timing of each new chapter, I assume it does not have much impact on the pace. Teffler keeps writing even while waiting for his editors to do their thing. It's not unusual for him to be halfway through writing the next chapter as his current chapter is going live.

As for Patreon, I don't want fans posting spoilers here, but I understand fan enthusiasm. Moreover, I have no problem with people encouraging folks to support Teffler as I assume that gives him even more motivation to keep up his aggressive writing pace even if he has not quit his job yet. It's not like I have to watch a Patreon ad in the middle of the story. I can always skip the comments if I want -- or better yet, skip an individual comment.

Those that are not signed up at Patreon shouldn't feel bad in my opinion. You can still support Teffler though with ratings and favourites. Strong ratings help more people discover the story which in turn leads to more people discovering Teffler on Patreon which as I said, likely leads to more and faster chapters.

Thanks to Teffler for writing a great story and thanks to all that support him here and elsewhere.

I understand your dilemma but Don`t take it on Tefler. That spoiler post is posted by an individual not by Tefler. Why on earth Tefler encourage post spoilers of next chapter which is released on Patreon here.

After multiple request by readers here he open patreon page so they can give some amount to tefler to his hard work. He require 40 hrs of work to complete one chapter.Also he has his regular job & family to take care .

So Don`t bullshit here about giving less than 5 stars for earlier chapter. He post chapter here for free your only job is read the chpater & give hightest rating .So stop whining & enjoy the chapter.

The bullshit pointed at Three Square Meals is pretty hilarious, but I don't recall any bullshit from fans of this story pointing to other writers.

The urge of fans to see Tefler actually being given some Patreon tips for his writing is warm and heartfelt, but agreed, that it gets slighty obnoxious.

Don't read if it bothers you.

A threat to downvote smells of vote rigging which is a reality of Literotica. Storiesonline for example has a different safeguard on voting and 3SM does much better there as a result. When trollish multivoting to one bomb the story is purged 3SM shoots up in rankings here on Literotica. The voting mob reasserted quickly a status quo that must serve somebody better than honest votes. It is not an issue pointing at any other writer, because rabid agenda fans seem most likely. To be honest in porn, it is amusing to see righteous indignation as a motivational mantra but that is a repeated message. What floats the boat of Teflerwriting many readers is insinuated to wrong. Other people's porn is supposedly superior.

Just wanted to say thanks Tef! You and yours here have now made 3SM's a $ instead of great story. Don't disagree but since your ways seem to want to spoil it all for those NON payin' types, I get it... Keep up the great work your doing, but not a 5 from here on out. (and I'll be going back to vote accordingly for all other stories!)

And quit bringing down the GREAT works of others with the BS others postings/votes!!!!

I see Jade being the perfect girlfriend for Tashana. She is sweet and innocent enough to counteract and defuse Tash s anger.

Additionally, with her past (that she now remembers) she can relate to the suffering Tash went through. Heck... her history is probably worse.

-Mikw

I suppose the sixth option that I can't remember people suggesting must just be a pure robot, but I just have never been satisfied that that would work with Johns powers and so fit the story.

If there are too many grammatical and spelling errors, I don't think it will get through the moderation queue, so if posted as is, you'll end up waiting even longer while it's initially rejected.

aderi, I think I'd counted six possibilities up till this episode of ways people had suggested that she could get a physical body and become more one of Johns girls. from the shinatobe pure cyborg, to using the shinatobe cyborg stage as a stepping stone, then removing the cybernetic bits so Faye ends up entirely organic, next building a body like Jades only with a purple gem at the center, fourth keeping Faye as she is but linking her to a form of telekinesis which gives her touch at the purple forms boundaries. fifth, let Rachel build a new race using progenitor biotech, and the sixth one, which I'm sure someone mentioned is unfortunately a blank, but i remember counting that high when I was looking last.

Cereden needs to be the exclusive marketer for "The Lioness Age Defying and Skin Rejuvination Beauty Cream".

Especially for his services to John and Company.

"I think you should post it as it is. Lots of people want to read the story sooner I don't think they are gonna be thinking about grammatical mistakes. They will going on like damn man story is up. Lest see what happens next in the progenitor saga of John Blake. Btw it's your decision but I don't think anyone is gonna mind 1 chapter unedited if it means it posts early."

The simple response is: you need to become a Patron on Patreon. That is the privilege we have for supporting Tefler. And for as little as $1 a month you can enjoy it with us.

Well I don't think too many people will mind even if there are some grammatical mistakes tefler

We read your story for the story telling

Grammatical errors are mostly overlooked and those who want to read proper grammar can wait till it is done editing

I think you should post it as it is

Lots of people want to read the story sooner I don't think they are gonna be thinking about grammatical mistakes

They will going on like damn man story is up

Lest see what happens next in the progenitor saga of john Blake

Btw it's your decision but I don't think anyone is gonna mind 1 chapter unedited if it means it posts early

We've all expected Faye to get a Fembot body for the entire time she's been a named character. What if Dana isn't the one to create a body for her? What if it's Rachel and Dana helps build a hybrid of Nexus-type tech and the Maliri tech that housed Shinatobe?

Rachel has been wondering how Mael'nerak created life. Stands to reason that she would want to try and I can't think of a better excuse.

4. What's next for Cederan

Am guessing he become a pimp for the white hair girls ?

LoL

What would even more interesting is an arc on what would happen and how they would react if they were separated from John?

Terra: Last time that happened they got so pissed they utterly incinerated a custom battleship with lots of people on board and Sakura was almost killed. and Alyssa went on a 'die and get the fuck out of my way' spree getting to him.

1hand: That is a FANTASTIC idea!

So many questions left unanswered.

1. Role of the lesser Matriachs

2. Wtf to do with Tashana

3. The Kintarks (again) after their huge losses

4. What's next for Cederan

5. What is the Terran High Command to do when they find about John's rel'n with both the Maliri and the Greys

6. How many Maliri will have white hair at the end of the 2 weeks refit

Tefler's work continues to improve.

It is worth being a Patreon.

"can we expect ch73 to be posted by Saturday or Sunday "

Unfortunately my grammar/punctuation editor isn't able to take a look at it until Saturday. I'll go through his edits as soon as I get them, then submit it straight after, but that probably means it'll go up on the site by about Tuesday.

Tefler

So tefler we can expect ch73 to be posted by Saturday or Sunday depending on hoh much time moderation takes

I just posted the latest chapter to Patreon. I've finished the first couple of rounds of editing, and once I've finished a final grammar/spelling pass, I'll submit it for moderation to literotica!

Tefler

If we've actually seen a big step forward for Faye and Alyssa. After their session together Faye had a time sort of asleep, I wonder if it was the online equivalent of 14 hours time working quicker in the online world, and Alyssa will wake up in a day or two suddenly finding new compartments in her head filled by 12 of her own thralls.

While we've all been milling over what fancy new powers the girls will exhibit we have forgotten about a certain flipside that we have rarely seen in the saga which is phobias. What are certain characters phobias? It would actually be a really interesting arc to delve into finding out what are fearless crew's phobias are and how they manage to over come them. What would even more interesting is an arc on what would happen and how they would react if they were separated from John?

On the subject of Tashana and her pyrokinetic abilities, the only outlet we have seen for them is the emotions that burns the brightest and fiercest, pure anger. It begs the question of how will her abilities change when she properly harnesses her anger or is joyous about something or as anonymous put it overcome by lust? It makes me wonder when they are going to stumble across a cryokinetic or a hydrokinetic (currently, Alyssa = Telekinetic & Telepath; Jade = Polymorph & Slight Eltrokinetic; Irillith = Electrokinetic & Technokinetic) as then that would bring some balance to the phsycic abilities and introduce a new dynamic to the bedroom of temperature play. When they finally bring Tashana into the fold I have a feeling we might start to see a bit more bondage come into play in the bedroom/ sex scenes as well as the advent of wax play. If they are daring enough I can see John being pampered/tortured by Alyssa with her oiling Irillith and Tashana up and having them play with each other and quite possibly Alyssa and Jade (as Alyssa's double) as well.

Lastly, on the subject of Tashana and Irillith; individually can either of them produce plasma or is it something that would require both of their respective abilities to achieve?

Dana should be like storm from the x-men, Rachel should be a white lighter like paige from charmed & Calara well I like the idea about controlling the ships weapons

Great to see Tef's work getting very close to the magic number that he can become a full-time writer.

At this point I'm just ripping the names off of a website, but how about chromakinesis? The ability to slow down one's perception of time is insanely useful for thinking, fighting, etc. You already have the ability to predict actions ahead of time by reading minds with basic mental powers, we don't need more, I think.

Wait, I thought Dana said she wanted fireballs from her eyes? I don't remember. Either way, it's irrelevant to me. Point is, her name at the start of the series was damn SPARKS, for thralls sake. If this series ends and she can't control lighting, I'm literally going to cry. (Well if the series ends I'm going to cry regardless but you get the point.)

What do you think about Alyssa being the one to turn Tashana into a thrall? Less awkward for the sisters(at least at first, he he), help with Tashana trusting that this crew is different from the other progenitors and that's backed up by the fact that Alyssa can show her memories to Tashana to convince her.

Dana gets her laser shooting eyes. And Calara needs to be able to connect to the weapons via psycic link as well as have prescience. Being able ot see the future, even if just a minute ahead of time, would be an almost insurmountable tactical advantage.

Tashana is sort of in a tight spot right now. It's more interesting than I thought.

Just think about it. From Tashana's perspective, how can she ever be sure John is good or evil? It's almost impossible. What can't he manipulate, what can't a progenitor change to give off whatever appearance he wishes?

Tashana can't trust any thralls or maliri, they were born and modified to be under his control.

She can't really go by other witnesses, since few know about the progenitors and John could easily just be manipulating the rest as well by solving what are to him trivial problems.

She can't trust Faye, who was created by them as well, by her sister no less!

She can't trust videotapes of jades death or something, since good acting is possible and torturing/killing your thralls is par for the course for the average progenitor.

So what's left? Well, Tashana has never been shown having regular communication telepathy powers like Alyssa.

But her fire powers are centred around emotions. Particularly passionate emotions, like hatred, rage, revenge, jealousy, lust.... Heh, basically all the stuff you're NOT supposed to do in Star Wars. Did I mention lust? That could get.... Hot.

(I'm sorry. I even winced at how bad that was. But I'm guessing that will be an plot device in the future, with flames being the by-product of certain "activities.")

Anyway, Back to her and emotion. The only way I see the crew being able to convince her that they're the good guys is Alyssa forcing Tashana to relive some of the crew's memories. Pretty sure those cannot be fabricated without it being obvious.

The crew will hesitate, since they would be forcing her. But technically It's just an attempt to communicate, so it's an acceptable compromise to me. Alyssa can get in touch with her sympathetic and motherly side.

The real question is this: can Alyssa fully immerse a unaffiliated stranger in another's memory? That could be difficult.

I'm also confused about Alyssa right now. Since she's now a progenitor, would she remain immortal if she was left alone? Or is she still dependent on John? The next time the crew needs to make someone a thrall maybe they need to experiment with Alyssa's milk. Might as well not put all your eggs in one basket. Maybe with Tashana to prove that the Invictus crew are different from other progenitor groups?

I have a theory about progenitors and their history that I will tell you all about soon.

Anyways, let's talk about powers. The Invictus has people with insane skills for days, but why should Alyssa, Sakura, John and Irillith get all the fun with physic powers? John already proved with Sakura that powers are only limited to imagination, so powers for everyone!

An obvious choice is Dana having the ability to control electricity with her mind. (Electrokinesis, if you want to be fancy.) she could power and control electronics with her mind.

I could imagine a scene where the raptor is in trouble and suddenly the weapons systems go haywire and destroy every enemy. Everyone wonders what happened until they turn around and see Dana on one knee, grinning and panting from exertion.

Rachel could learn high speed regeneration wolverine style.

(Vitakinesis)

I'm not sure about the others. Any ideas?

Re an earlier comment, Tashana is able to resist John because of the tumor, just like her sister and mom. The solution that might bring her around is to talk to the former slave Terran girls that John is hauling around. On the station Tashana had the impression John was killing everyone and she was passed out when they left. Speaking to these former slaves who know what John did, who were healed with one dose of cum, and not turned into thralls may cause her to reconsider her former assumptions.

Speaking of the former slaves, is anyone concerned that when they get home they will start spreading the word of John's magic cum. I see the potential for a PR nightmare.

I am a super intelligent person in my own mind....just ask me! LOL

My bad, stupid autocorrect

Crap!.... now I gotta subscribe to paetron.... I CAN'T

WAIT TILL END OF WEEK.... starting to go through

Withdraw here lol

"I thought the same thing. Great minds think alike, eh? I was thinking the bodyguards, too."

Or the alternative

fools seldom differ. ;)

Mal

Fantastic news: So: Is it worth a dollar to see it 4 days early? Patreon....hmmmmm.

I thought the same thing. Great minds think alike, eh? I was thinking the bodyguards, too.

Can hardly wait for the next chapter. There really should be more than five stars for this story.

Hey everyone,

I've finished Chapter 73, and handed over the second part to my editors. Hopefully it'll be up on Patreon tomorrow or Tuesday, and on here by the end of the week.

Tefler

I don't know how long it takes a thralls hair to grow back in but I think Edraele needs to dye and cut her hair so Tashana doesn't go ballistic at the site of another thrall and give her time to enlighten her

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Why is it that the end of each chapter leaves me needing more? Great chapter again. New Under-world plot will be interesting.

Loving the idea of a sequel.

Doesn´t look like I´m the only septuagenarian fan of yours, and we´re comparing you to a lot of the great SCIFI and Fantasy writers we´ve enjoyed over the years...don´t know if it´s good or bad, but, I do know we like your style....

Each time I get into your most recent installment, it´s like I go through the whole story again in my head, it´s that well written...reminds me of C.J. Cherry ´s (C.J. CHERRYH) "Gate of Ivrel", hell all you write reminds me quite a bit of her style (tough 3rd person and how your characters minds are working, in their own thoughts and words)...leaves you with that ´Gotta Have More´ hunger...Thanks again and keep it coming...

Do you plan on eventually having Tanya join the crew? Because it seems like something she would enjoy and willingly choose if given the choice.