All Comments on 'Tiefling's Lesson'

This was just awful story telling. UGH!

I was confused before I got through the first paragraph. I think there must be some back story from Dungeons and Dragons?, about which I have no idea because I have never played the game. Don't assume your audience has knowledge of background that you understand, but didn't give. I am not actually sure that is the real problem with this story. When you lost me at the start, it is very demotivating to attempt the rest of the story. Lost=unreadable.

You do know how to craft a sentence. Please be sure to think of the story you are crafting from the reader's point of view. The reader is going to ask, "Why should I spend time trying to figure this out?"

Don't be discouraged. Try again. The fact that you can put words together in a coherent sentence, lifts you into an upper tier of writers.

5*, because anyone brave enough to create a story and put it out there for the world to lambast deserves more than a 1.33