All Comments on 'Timid Ch. 02'

this has all the makings of what will be a great story, but your chapters are way too short. doing so will eventually cause the story to drag out and your average reader to lose interest. otherwise, keep up the good work!

i was looking forward for this chapter i liked it.. but it's just too short :S

This applies to both chapters. Ch 2 should have been part of Ch 1. I really want to read more about these people and hope you write much more and soon

Great start, I am hooked. But please make the chapters longer.

This is LITEROTICA for goodness sake! How could you dress her up with no panties and allow her to go home UNTOUCHED?? This could have been a hot piece. and pls make em long.

Luved it though.

I like this. It has a lot of potential to go a lot of interesting places. I for one, have nothing against short chapters. It peeks the interest and keeps people waiting for a little more...and obviously leaves them just a tad sexually frustrated. I cannot wait to read more. Please continue to write this!

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE KEEP WRITING

hope you update soon :)

You are telling, not showing.

Some dialogue would be nice.

Or, if you wish to narrate, then tell the same story twice. Once from her viewpoint, once from his. Two stories, not changing the point of view within one story.

Please finish the story.

This is an amazing start.please complete the story??!

FBI open up. sir you are going to be arrested for withelding information despite public demand. to get a bail release the next part as soon as possible. is that understood?