All Comments on 'Tipsey Wife, Happy Life'

Yes please! A most enjoyable beginning, one that really begs to be continued.

hope there is more!!

YES

Story had a enough buildup for a quick short story, but definitely need an editor to catch the little typos. Also, might need to clarify on positions when it comes to the sex scenes. Didn't realize Jenny was doing reverse cowgirl and that's how Tori got to ream her.

Yes! Short and sweet. A good build up, but the hook could have been stronger. There is enough sex in the story for everyone. What's next?

Nice story, but I almost bailed at, "birthday suite." A suite is a set of rooms or a composition for musical instruments. I think you meant "birthday suit," The clothes you were born in, i.e. nude.

Hell Ya

LOVED IT. what is going to come next? foursome? I wanna be included.

Good, not outstanding. Run your work through spell/grammar check before submitting. Yes, I understand that this isn't a literary site but when a grammar nerd gets submerged in a story & there is a major typo (Troi instead of Tori) it can be like throwing a bucket of ice water on them.

I don't read the multi chapter stories. I like my erotica short & sweet. I don't read stories longer than one page. So my personal preference would be not to submit by chapter. But that's just me.

I really liked this. Please do a second chapter

Spell checker might not have a problem with suit vs suite

great story and please do write more chapters. it will help you in the ratings if the chapters are longer then one page here, try to aim for 2 -3 full pages at the least. People tend to vote higher on longer stories.

I enjoyed it. I do tend to enjoy the longer stories with multiple chapters and pages. So in my opinion you should do at least 1 more chapter.

Yeah, suit/suite was jarring, but your biggest problem is run-on sentences. This is an example.

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I'm Bryan, thankfully Jenny didn't listen to her friends, she spent four years in school ignoring their constant chorus of, "What are you doing with him?!?"

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That's actually three sentences, not one.

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I'm Bryan. Thankfully Jenny didn't listen to her friends. She spent four years in school ignoring their constant chorus of, "What are you doing with him?!?"

Yes, it deserved a follow-up. I'd like to see a harem develop, it would be revenge on all those trying to discourage her from being with him. Payback's a bitch or in this case the ladies are his bitch's. hahahah