by SweetestThing
Do you really know this tale is the truth? I mean, how to say, it sounds a bit futuristic a bit extraordinary ...... But i believe you and its a lovely story and for sure makes ness happy ..... Smile
Santa pays a visit that is better than dreaming of sugarplums!
It earned the highest possible score by its elegant simplicity, sweet naivety, and light-hearted humor. Thank you.
Best line:
"Do you know what the fully independent and actualized woman with the legitimate grievance against the male patriarchy does?"
That made me laugh out loud. Thank you.
I loved this story! Seriously i couldn't stop smiling. XD Okay now i've always had a thing for fantasy stories and i've had some crushes on non-human characters, but for some reason i have never thought of Santa Claus in THAT way... until i came across this gem of a story!
Seriously this has to be by far the hottest thing i've read in a long time... and sweet heavens, suddenly i'm wishing Santa really did exist and that he'd please come visit me this year.XD
Hot Hot Hot! I think i'll definitely stop by and read this story again when it gets close to the holidays.. get some more of that christmas spirit. lol.
Damn, that was really, really great! I'll never again think of Christmas the same!
Absolutely loved this story! Great mix of humor and eroticism, and very engaging. You might let 'Vanessa' know that that the Miracle was on 34th Street, not 42nd...but hey, maybe it was an alternate universe!
I really like the humor you put into this piece. It had me laughing a couple of times. Thanks for writing it. I hope you win.
Nicely done. A lot in three pages, but I liked it.
You could have had Peggy Lee singing on the radio on the drive home, to reinforce your kicker?
I hope you win the contest, because that was Awesomesauce!
Ohmygoodness! So much to say about this story. I loved the mythological references and elements sprinkled throughout. Santa's dialogue (if not his actions) stayed in his jolly character the entire time, a brilliant touch. The attention you paid to the senses and sensations, yumm. Mama Bear's fierce protection of her cub, even with the gun: What a hoot! Her father's endearing quirks: I love that he baked the cookies! Santa, the magical-mythical-gift-giving-lover--steam! Goodluck!
~Luna
PS: one teensy weensy typo/edit noticed: in the beginning Vanessa had the brightest green eyes; then they turned brown. Was this on purpose?
This was a very hot story, with good descriptions of the sexual activity. It wasn't all that original and could have used better editing in a few places, but that wasn't enough to distract from the whole. So far, this was the best I have read in the contest, and I voted accordingly.
Great Story.
Nice to know Vanessa won't be missing out back at study.
Men get to be filthier old bastards as they get older.
Apparently the same applies to Santa.
And did he score or what?
Loved this story! That's what I call a perfect Christmas story. Thank you so much for writing it.
Wow, I've never thought of Santa turning me on, but I'll never see him the same way again. Great story