All Comments on 'To Even the Score'

Congratulation. 5⭐.

It worked very well for me.

Probably not the best idea, but it was fun!

Amazing as always! Love this one <3

Like the story a lot. AAAA++++

Good one. Lean but not spare and just off beat enough.

Unique. Like a river. Like an animal.

I liked this playful humorous take for the category that is notoriously dense. Seriously, I wish there were more stories from you

Well done.

Sometimes, we get to set things right again!

5

Good story!! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

On one hand, the BTBis in me wants to give this 5 stars. On the other hand, the realist in me screams "He just made his divorce more difficult, since she can accuse him of cheating too". Then again, he's a librarian at 24 - I'll just close my eyes and pretend they have no wealth to divide up, so it won't hurt the divorce, and enjoy the BTB :) Thanks! Just what I needed after the crappy stuff posted to LW lately, full of forgiveness, loving cheating spouses and outright RAACs.

What else can you say but - very well told! Detailed but succinct and paints an excellent picture of a fictional situation and the possible emotions arising.

She says she doesn't condone cheating, but this is a good story anyhow.

Well done :) 5 stars

I liked it. First time I have ever seen "mean girls" used as a compliment though. I must confess that the term likely could apply to me but I have always thought it as not suffering fools.

Well, did she have to cancel the wedding after all?

Loved the directness and the humour between the two of them.

Wow!

I suppose this new couple will become the center of attention at any gathering they attend, after someone asks how they met!

Comeuppance much?

Not very often are cheaters noses rubbed in it so blatantly. And by one of my favorite authors, too.

Well done and thanks for sharing.

The author just can’t help herself as her LW’s tale morphs into Romance. As always, beautifully written with a smoothly flowing (though improbable) plot. The fact that the story is not among her best is simply a testament to the quality of her work. Thanks for sharing your talents!

Loved it, loved it, loved it.

Five stars

Good jog. Simple, well written, with likable characters. I couldn't ask for more. Thanks!

Liked it!

This story reminded me of Todd127's The Harpy in every good way. I really enjoyed this.

Very refreshing. Instant revenge. Nothing convoluted or messy. They dumped their cheaters and found each other, a much better match. In fact, from the description of the other two, Cat and Hudson like they both traded significantly up. Talk about the perfect rebound.

love it

"Meet Cute" in a classic Loving Wives style with a splash of the sexy kind of revenge. This would make a great opening scene in a romantic comedy. One with a 18+ rating, naturally.

You have a new fan. So nice to read a well written story that doesn’t go on for pages and pages <3

Nailed it

Short and sweet. I loved this story. 5*

Excellent as always! Thank you!

Nice story, well done.

You are the queen of great dialogue. Beautiful job.

5 stars. Perfect. Wasn't just sexy, but the humor involved was great. Thanks.

Good story. Very good writing style. This one is set up for a part 2 that you could have fun with should you desire. Hope so!

BTB is a genre for man-boy incels who have to type one-handed because the other is busy jerking their micro penis… 9.9 times out of 10.

This is the .1 because you told an actual story instead of an exposition dump, and didn’t forget the erotica in literotica. Good job.

Nice job.

There's never enough of a good story, so I wish there was more interaction between the cheaters and the two MC's.

@inka2222, how does it make divorce more difficult? With no-fault, neither heating matters at all.

That was a nice twist. Loved it!

That was quick and to that point. Really enjoyed it. Thanks!!

Compact, well written, ...and fun

I hardly think this story is an example of condoning cheating; anything but. You couldn't have made that any clearer if you had said so literally in the story. Beautiful short story. You could post a follow-on in romance. I'd sure read it. lpw

Not necessarily a fan of revenge fucks, but this one seemed to work for me. 5 stars...

Sometimes things or events happen for a reason even in LW.

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

Now that's a story. Loved it thank you from UK. 5*

A great story! I loved it on Patreon, and love it here. Bravo! 5 stars.

Yeah, really?

Cleverly done. 5

Excellent story! Hey, now she doesn't have to cancel the wedding stuff. Four months is enough time for Cat and Hudson to figure out they love one another. :D

Very nice. 5*

Creative! Nicely done with a helping of light humor.

Don't stop writing

Five stars

really keep your day job.\

Thank you! It was nice to read a story that didn't follow the BTB template. Great line: "He tasted like wine and bad decisions"

Lady, you've got the Bear's attention. 5 stars, and I definitely approve. It's nice to have a happy ending. He could have beat the shit out of lover boy, but you can work on it. That's o.k. I like your style.

The BEAR

Great story. But some small guys are mean enough to stab Hudson. And some wives, too. He took a risk. D

Silly, but why not? A light hearted romp on a single page - how can you go wrong? 4*

Well crafted from start to finish. Loved it.

More please.

MLJ

For someone who doesn't condone cheating, this story about cheaters cheating on cheaters say otherwise..... no likeable characters in this one.

OP just gave you all a clinic on writing a short story driven by meaningful dialogue and realistic characters. Notice, there was no long, rambling backstory, no Reddit-like introduction, and no over-explanation of what she is SHOWING us. This writer, who is commercially successful (see her bio), trusts the reader to follow her story--she doesn't write something and then explain it to you. That makes it both more readable and less wordy. The story itself is a rather simple premise, but the quality is in how she treats it, and how she adds the creative nuances: the line about the wedding flowers not having been grown yet; the exchange concerning apologizing for their cheating partner, etc. 5 stars

-Yossarian

This was delicious, superbly written (as always) and a unique ending (which is far too rare here)

Best author on LIT! Please keep it coming!!

Thank you, Nora!

Simple, but clean and effective. 5 stars.

Well done. A cliche trope, but with skilled and creative execution. A worthwhile read

revenge sex makes you just as pathetic as the *originally* cheating partner. depressing, but thankfully short expose of what not to do if someone cheats on you.

What inka2222 said. 4****

It just felt right - great short story.

Loved it. The sentence - "He tasted of wine and bad decisions."; made me say, "Now this is a writer!" Well done.

good story good revenge

A couple of cheaters cheating on a couple of cheaters.

Short as it is, way too many words.

Great story these two need a follow up story.

Well, Ms Nora Fares, this is the first story of yours I've read. Great story and writing. Loved it, so now I'll have to read the rest of your stuff. Work, work, work. It's always something, I swear. 5 stars, and thanks for posting.

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And, for those who commented, I don't think it matters that they did it in front of the wife and fiancé; divorce laws are such today, it's difficult for either side to do anything that the court cares about. The court just wants it done and out of the way. I'm surprised the judge doesn't just glance at the papers, shrug and say, "Yeah, whatever. Done. Next! Move along, people. Move along."

Best revenge fuck ever!

I love it, beastie!

Excellent writing.

"He tasted like wine and bad decisions"

What a great description! Thank you for gracing us with another stunning story, Ms. Fares. Please don't keep us waiting so long next time.

Seems fair. Great to see something a little different in a LW story.

Loved it. Great writing, Steady pacing to get to the BTB's part just wish you would have included a little of how they progressed after the revenge. With the end of one relationship and the beginning of a new one, well, ... how did that work out for them? Not really needed for this story to work, just would have been nice to put the exclamation point on the ending. Maybe there is another story just in telling how the score tallied up once the score was finished. Thanks for submitting this story for us to enjoy. 5-stars.

Short AND sweet. Thank you!!

Always great to hear from you. That was fun! thanks!

This piece is clever/fun — enjoyed. You mention that you posted two other LW pieces: Afterglow and In Our Bones. Well, got to say both resonated for me in very different ways to your credit as a writer. “Afterglow” — beautifully poignant piece; how can one not love. “Our Bones” — painfully beautiful; so heartfelt. You are a creative writer.

CINCO ESTRELLAS JEFE!

Your stories never disappoint me. 5+

Unique situation played out well. TY

Exceptional!

I rarely venture into this category, and only did so because of this writer, and this story didn't disappoint.

I will say this: some could have made some hay over the fact that despite the cheating from the wife and Cat's fiancé, the only real "cheating" stemmed from Hudson's wife starting the whole thing. Yes, Cat/Hudson did get revenge, but they didn't start out thinking that way. Some could also claim the cheating "redhead" is too stereotypical as a device and that this story could have benefitted from more character development and backstory (i.e., since Hudson found out a few days before, why could we not have read about any signs/reasons he discovered?) Despite the structure the story provides us with, as this being quite sudden, we can still ask those questions. For example, the story could up the "burn" had we read about how gentlemanly and considerate Hudson was, and despite how "mean" Cat claimed to be, if being "mean" was simple sarcasm (all the evidence we have) or more of a gruff approach she learned to make less tenacious, potential suitors shy away, in hopes the guy she "landed" would "stick" better through highs and lows in their relationship. So the story could have framed Hudson far more sympathetically and somehow proven Lydia to be a calculating wench. As it stands, all we are left with is the name "Damien," which derives from "devil, (in popular culture examples)" which essentially explains his character flaw. However, the real fly in the ointment is how "Lydia" normally means "noble" and "beautiful," although this story completely upends that, and at least the only impression I get from her when she walks into the room is that she's vapid and mostly airheaded. Does this story approach work as a spur-of-the-moment-idea? Yes. However, both Cat and Hudson could have stood on far higher ground had they simply gone in and broke up the cheating couple, experienced an interlude where they got to know each other far more, then hooked up after having hamstrung Damian and Lydia; it could have been more of the "have one's cake and eat it too" without going overboard. Just seems like the story could have been expanded in other ways to give it more punch.

Despite my alternate propositions, my mind still works quite linearly, and I rated on my first impression on how it struck me, and regardless of the shorter length, I rated this a 5, as the story impressed me as only focusing on the immediate act of cheating and not about the "why."

Excellent, as always. Thank you!

Made his divorce more difficult?

Maybe in some states, in other states it is all no fault so it would not make any difference at all.

Well written very short story. LoL!

Sparked my imagination. Thank you.

Not very believable ***

A little Poe, a lot of comedy and a little Hallmark card. Helluva ride and a damn fine story.

Nicely done, too bad real life seldom provides instant karma.

Thanks for sharing.

Good and imaginative writing is always good to read. Enjoyed it, altho yes, a little short.

(Would have liked to have read that her wedding, 4 months off, was now back on)

Flash at it's best. Well done.

5 stars - I really like this story

My ending:

15 years and 4 kids later, he's still my fucking super hero.

I appreciate just how human their actions especially Hudson's actions were. He wasn't really thinking, just reacting, his only real revenge was wearing a Star Wars shirt his wife didn't like (wonder if it was a Revenge of the Sith shirt for maximum irony?) and Cat automatically apologized despite it not being her fault. The revenge sex feels pretty natural, two hurt people trying to get some measure of revenge. If there is ever a second chapter, not that it needs it but wouldn't be a bad thing to have either, I'd love to see a happy ending for Cat and Hudson, that this was more then a revenge fling, but also some backstory why their respective exes went with each other. Easy 5 stars, great story.

Wow nice twist. Great revenge and payback.

My ending:

4 years and 15 kids later, he's still my fucking super hero.