All Comments on 'To Late to Talk About It'

<p>These are the true ravings of a madman -- poorly written and more than a little insane.</p>

<p>I felt dirty just reading it.</p>

<p>Yes, the author was trying to show that the husband went insane given the pressure of his situation. Still, this belongs on some other website for a different readership. Perhaps screwy holy rollers, sadists, wannabee psychiatrists.</p>

<p>Anyone but readers of erotica.</p>

This outcome is not that unusual. Although fire tends to be the weapon of choice to "purge" the demons. Sometimes people do get a bit upset by adultery.

after all in theBullet/s real heart and mind all we know is filed with Hate. Has anyone noticed how after all all these numerous sequel to Nicci vile man hating 5year old temper tantrum story ...that an asshole like TheBullet... who should change his name to the DOUCHEBAG-- never reacted this strongly towards the ORIGINAL story ?

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But when this guy clearly flips out because of the hate scorn and humilation from the wife... that doesnt seem to bother TheDOUCHEBAG.

<p>You can call me disgusting names while hiding behind your anonymity. That takes a great deal of courage, anonymous. You must be very proud of yourself as you beat off to your virulence</p>

<p> Have you read any of my stories? Has there been violence in any of them? Any murders? Even my rape fantasy was non-violent.</p>

<p>And yet you claim that I am filled with hate. An interesting analysis.</p>

<p>I didn't condemn Nici's first story because I found it interesting and original. I thought the wife in it was a self-indulgent bitch and said so in my post. However, when written from that viewpoint, it really demonstrated how self-indulgent and disrespectful she had become.</p>

<p>Yes, in RealDoc's story, the husband is driven insane. I get it. Still, I don't like violence. Infidelity is not an executable offense in my universe (or in any state in the United States of America, with the possible exception of Texas).</p>

<p>I recognize what RealDoc was trying to do. I don't like how he did it. My family was affected by a murder-suicide. I still have to deal with the aftershocks years later.</p>

<p>So fuck you, anonymous and the horse you rode in on. And next time display a pair of balls by leaving a real member name.</p>

why kill himself like a coward.this was as bad as nici story the other way.the story was rushed and read like a kid wrote it.punish the wife and lover,but not the kids by killing yourself.there other ways of punishment without killing them or yourself.to many holes in this story.

I am a big fan of your more recent submittals but

am VERY disappointed with this tale. Nothing about

this story reflects your earlier maturing story-

telling abilities. I had really looked forward to your

next submittal and will consider this just a writer's

slump. I do want to thank you for the time and effort

you put into entertaining us with your tales.

Please keep submitting.

I'm sorry, I couldn't read it. This story needs an editor...

The ending of this story is pretty hard. But you could see were the story was going long before the end. I can understand this type of ending better than all of the wimps endings that Literotica is known for. Overall a good story. I'm always looking for stories written by RealDoc. Thank you for writing.

like the insanity,written like your insane,ty.but u misspelled {the}and it ruined it for me,come on people

This is too severe for me to call entertainment. I think it was written with effort and given a side that the writer wanted to portray as evil over good. I personally applaud this concept being given an exam as it is truly a call for understanding instead of calling it just a bunch of Bible thumpers. What does it mean to be insane or temporarily insane? Many people think it is a sham but I personally have seen people jump off into the deep-end over the pain of their life and loved ones being consumed. To each their own, but this was good to a degree of what someone might fantasizes as being pushed over the edge.<P>Please continue to give us your stories<P>PT

Felt disjointed. Perhaps that is the way a man like him would think, but it would IMHO have read better if written smoother.

I don't know what to think about how you came up with this as an option for consequences to Nici's original story. It's pretty brutal and not very appetizing. I don't really buy it as a sequel to her story. The original "Jonathan" appeared to emotionally and mentally have 'both oars in the water' while the hallucinations and subsequent actions of your character would seem to be those of someone 'off center' for some time. For me the two "Jonathan's" shared the same name and nothing else. Also, I had difficulty believing that no one throughout your story picked up on the so obviously telegraphed intentions of your protagonist. That was more than my ability to suspend disbelief could muster.<P>As to the mechanics of the story, your presentation just seemed awkward and unpolished. You really should consult one of the editors provided here in your future efforts. <i>(eg. Your "To" in the title should be "Too.")</i><P>Doc, you did provide an original alternative for the continuation of Nici's story. I commend you for that.

Yikes, this was fun!

Can't say I "loved" this story, however, I think it is very credible that Jonathan would go nuts when presented with the set-up in the original NiCi story. Sad, tragic, violent - yes, but still a very credible outcome. As for Henry, I would say he deserved what he got - don't do the crime if you can't do the time.

A selfish lack of reason can cause an unreasonable response which the Author portrayed well here. Life and consequence isn't all paddy cake paddie cake is it.<P>

Selfishly stirred emotions evoke non-predictable responses. See the comments between the 2 anonymous below [ the bullet and another anonymous ].<P>

When dealing with the non-caring selfish emotions expressed by nicci there wasn't much of a rational ending possible by any other nor her - just a wandering through a myriad of possible what ifs that didn't make any more sense than the original story of cruel selfishness.<P>

Make sense - of course not but then neither did the foundation. Isn't suicide the ultimate unreasonable selfishness?<P>

Nice work Author. Reality doesn't need to be lifelike does it. More please.

Afraid I would have stayed for my kids and let the two lovers live in paradise of Hell for eternity tho. Shoot them both in the genitals and leave after ripping out the phone.

Needs editorial help to clean up the typographical errors and syntactic blunders. As the storyline, it seems unlikely given the husband's character as portrayed in the original story but perhaps RealDoc envisioned him going insane, causing him to become homicidal. The violence of this conclusion leaves one cold, and the ending is unsatisfying.

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The writing here is average, and the characters significantly depart from the original story. I make no judgment as the rightness or wrong of that departure but, as fiction, I expect the characters to act in ways that are consistent with their nature. That didn't happen in this telling.

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At best, it deserves an average mark but the mediocre writing quality dragged the story down. I thank you for your effort.

Come on folks give Doc a break. I thought it was a more realistic scenario than many of you indicated. I know because when my wife of 5 years cheated and left with her lover I went off the deep end and came with in a moment of doing what Jonathan did in this story. Only a flash of hesitation prevented me from pulling the trigger. I thought

Doc presented an interesting alternate ending to the story.

Sometimes if you beat a dog enough, he will go mad and seek to kill.

Boyd

to RealDoc's ending. Please delete the last three lines and insert/substitute:

Susan was horrified and screemed; "please Jonathan, don't shoot me, please!!!"

"Why not Susan, don't you want to meet me in paradise?" He replied.

"Yes, but not now. Please don't shoot, I love you, please put away the gun and we can be together again, please!"

"OK" Susan, you can wait. You can spend a few years waiting, and I will be in paradise for you when it is your turn", he said and put the barrel in his mouth and pulled the trigger.

When the paramedics arrived they found one quy without a cock, one man without a head and a babbeling woman saying "To late to talk, to late to talk." That was the only words she spoke for the remaing 50 years of her life in the institution she lived in until her 80th birthday.

I understand how a certain theme - certainly extreme violence is not a surprising example - could be a 'hot button'. I confess to resorting at times to feedbacks which upon later review seemed to me too harsh. But I still suggest that we try to avoid too harsh critic. I would suggest drawing the line in de legitmizing the very effort of the author, as far as being placed in Literotica. We have seen in more than few cases stories which ended with either suicide or murder- suicide. Surely, the quality of the writing is a matter which could be debated, but that is another matter. <P>

On a personal note, I was very sorry and upset to read that such violence was inflicted on your family.

Usually I am not a stickler for typos etc. but I have to admit that upon reading the story's title "To late to talk about it", I had a mini case of a ‘stomach rebellion’, Come again? Not “too late” but “to late”? I had to convince myself to get over my annoyance and open the link to the story. <P>

I'll give the story that it was not formulaic. It read like a borderline psychotic narration (the guy actually had hallucinations). Whether it was meant to depict a real Psycho or a literary device to demonstrate the extreme emotional turmoil which a blatant betrayal can put into a somewhat fragile person - it was, how shall I put it -unusual! <P>

I still feel that you went overboard with the thick hints, regarding the "plan", thus taking away any sense of surprise or development. <P>

In addition, both husband and wife had pretty much one quality (different one to each of them...) that we could tell about from the story. <P>

It was a quick sketch of one tact: the outcome of a betrayal: a crazed revenge. Got it. I believe you could have taken the same and upgrade it to a much more refined story.

I have ever glanced at. And that's all I did: glancing at it, scrolling down quickly. Why bother to pen some thing as meaningless, as bad, as idiotic, as incomprehensibly stupid as this? <p>

It's not that things like this didn't happen. No, they do happen all the time. It's just the dialogues written here that is incredibly stupid. It's not just bad, or simply aggrevating, like, say the original author's train of thought, as storied. THIS continuation is sheer stupidity!

Man this is some wild shit. I loved it. You really pushed the envelope on this one. Keep em coming.

We like this author's style!

A bit crazy but then some people are this crazy. After all why suicide. Kill her and him, do a little time in the psycho ward. Then go find a real woman.

my expectations go right to the floor -- and were fully met.

I just found this one. Nice plot and good depiction of a man going crazy. This happens more than some of the commenters are willing to admit. Too bad Anonymous misspelled the word misused when he/she complained about the "mis-used" word "To" in the title.

Keep writing and thanks for the effort.

Kathi

Trash needs to be thrown out and the two were trash. He is mentally ill, would serve a few years in a hospital and eventually released to raise his kids.

Kinda crazy/sick story, I suppose madness causes suicide as well as homicide. Sure wasn't a happy ending, but much better than the original ending.

Well done author!

Another portrait of a Jonathan cuckold, as a confused wimpy man, endlessly confused and unable to accept that his wife had whored herself out for over a year, behind his back, and was doing her best , now, to figuratively cut his balls off. The man portrayed here does not have a backbone of any consequence. Still simpering and telling this worthless whore that he still loved her very late into this story. He is obviously someone who has a very low IQ and little ability to cut through the crap, with any level of true understanding or decisive decision making ability, as he is led by far more intelligent people. The fact that he has let his whore wife cuckold him for such a long time, perhaps as another filthy prostitute for her lover, without any real realization of how he was being used, says it all. Dumb and dumber!

let her see henry shot fatally first and die, and she knows its her date to follow...and make sure to have a solid alibi and get rid of the weapn. She is insured I trust.

A simple walk into the woods with a gun and shovel would have worked out better. Her lover's disappearance would have left Susan with doubt and fear but no real knowledge. Johnathan would enjoy the fruits of his labor and revenge without risk of punishment. The bastard would have been a missing person no one would have missed.

The husband kills the wife, himself. the lover is still alive and dickless. the kids he love so much are alone after the death of both parents. and he believes they are going to heaven. enough said.

A great story and a perfect ending!

but suicide over a slut wife, get real

but what a payback. TK U MLJ LV NV

JPB and other writers take note and learn!

But the point is taken. The point being and I quote " If you cheat it's the end of the world." That's my quote.

That is definitely a different angle LOL

Again not necessarily the most reasonable - but hey it worked for him -

Sorta screws up the kids which would have been my priority all along -

if one could ask them both, were you satisfied now, TK U MLJ LV NV

rough ending he should have started a fire and pissed off to south america and got laid

the only one to live is the lover? not

It grossed me out. Sorry!

Read the paper, this happens every day! A guy catches his wife screwing around and people die!

I like most of RealDoc's stories, but this one was just awful.

she drove her husband insane, and she paid the cost.

better she just murdered him and took up a lover. Less pain for him that way. And she didnt love him anyway, as her actions proved. Sadly, also demonstrated she didnt love her children either.

Plausible scenario. Have always wondered about some of the possibilities over the cheating bitch wife who treats her husband and family in such a manner. All of the cuck stories never have a possible ending where the husband snaps. I mean truly snaps. Even wimps go off the road. Some commit suicide, some maim, others murder. When you take a weak but hetero male and subject him to the lifestyle as it's described where is the breaking point? Is there one? I would bet more finally break than live a lifetime as a chuck. Coercion, forced or I'm just giving you your fantasy does not make for a long happy life for anyone. A lot of stories are only snippets in time. What are the long tern consequences? Just rambling thoughts. Thanks for the story.

it is not a satisfactory resolution to the problem.

This should be listed under humor because it's the funnies piece of shit that I've read in a long time. 'Called the cops to have them force her to tell him who her lover is'? What a freaking joke! He should have just walked in front of a bus and saved the cost of the shotgun shells. Another 1* story. This is getting pretty tiring. Too bad. I had higher hopes after reading 'The fourth wife'.

your story is great and thank you for your effort and content. Gave you a 5

If he broke the mirror by punching it, most likely his hand/fist would be bleeding pretty good. He’d leave bloody hand prints all over the bedding and pillows. Susan would certainly notice that. Also, he’d porbably have had somehow bandage the wound, which probably require gauze and tape, maybe even stitches, around his whole hand. Susan, even though she’s a lying cheating cunt,, would notice that too.

OK-OK, two technical issues — I don’t know, but if he passed out from drink AND bumping his head on the front walkway, unless it were gravel or stones set into grass, most likely it’d be concrete; wouldn’t he be conked out long enough for a neighbor to see him and call 911 ? Just sayin’. It was the front walkway, wasn’t it? If not, then never mind.

“What’s wrong with too many violins?! I say there’s not enough violins in the world. We need more violins. And classical music. Why when I was young... What? Violence??? Oh, never mind.” - Rosann Rosannadana

Too bad he had to be dillusionally crazy to do it. I wish more people in these would get crazy-mad, and then shoot the fuckers. Too often some alpha male will not just control the wife, but by extension control the husband by having them tacitly, or non-voluntarily allowing cheating to occur. Even they hate it, and what it’s doing to the family, they sommehow keep letting then fuck.

I just don’t get it. I’m no alpha male, but damned if I’m letting someone screw my wife without repercussions. I guess it’s one way if making a beta into an alpha, even if it’s for a short while.

I get anger and rage but I still think you’re dogshit for leaving your kids ducked up like that.

A little extreme, but I feel it. Bad news for hubby though. Bitch ain't going to heavan. With Henry's lower parts blown off with a 12 gauge, he will meet her in hell.

DV on the skank. Don't think so.

For once both adulterers got what they deserved...especially Henry

For sure, this is the most probable end for Nici's story in the Real World. No doubt about it. Just take a look in the newspaper. Most of the american men are not cuckold.

Jonathan should have read Literotica: he could have found a more creative way to burn the cheaters, without burning himself or his kids.

"Henry" he blubbered. I'm not the man you want." It wasn't Henry, He was just letting Susan and her real lover use his house. The real man Jonathan was looking for came out of the bedroom naked and to Jonathan's surprise... It was his boss from work...No wonder His boss sent him out of town so much...Two shots erupted from the pump action."get your clothes back on in a hurry and lets get out of here... While his wife was dressing. Jonathan rigged the house with a leaky gas line... set the thermostat and together they left the house.... It was winter and the house was an older farm house with no nearby neighbors to have heard the shots... Six hours later, the house filled with gas, the thermostat kicked on. The house completely disappeared in the explosion. Nothing was left of the house and both bodies were cremated. the end.

I was reading a few of the alternate version and this one was the only one where Johnathan lost his mind because of his misery. It was good the writing was done well. So I gave it a 3 star. That doesn't mean I am not grateful with the author. I am in fact. It is easy to write a story and post it and try to please anyone who reads it. Kudos for the author's courage.

Now for the story. This woman is just out of this world, living in fantasy world. That is what the original author Nicci was trying to portray, a selfish, narcissist, who just don't consider happiness of anyone but herself while congratulating her kind heart by taking care of another man's needs.

This alternate ending wasn't to my liking though. The husband lost it and ended his and his wife's lives, crazy enough to not think of his kids and to leave his kids without any parents. So sad.

Only way to end it. One psychpath in the family was enough. When she made a second one, it was all over.

If you aren’t familiar with guns, don’t write about guns

LOVE IT!!! He made them pay the price...

Love a good btb story but he should've just moved on. Now the kids are forever damaged.

They will not be in heaven......

The word batshitcrazymotherfucker comes to mind.

Rubbish author trying to hard to be smart. Using demons to make him the really put upon hero when all he is is a nut case

Pretty pathetic

Too much gore. Divorce would be nice instead.

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 A much better end to NICI's pathetic trilogy.

Of course, it would be better if the cheaters died and the husband continued on with his life. After all, he is the wronged party. Why should he bear any punishment? He didn't cause the situation.

Why would he want her that bad anyway? A whore isn't going to heaven. So, he killed himself for nothing.

So glad these aren't real people and events.

Nope, not my sort of story.

How was he not pathetic in this version?

2 stars only because you tried writing. Otherwise, this was beyond bad, totally failing Nici's work. Should've tried another story, original or otherwise. Bob

Fundamentally off...and not in a good way...

2 stars

Nici's original is a fail in that it was supposed to be two strong believable real characters no MSR, narcissistic disorders etc ... yeah right. Fail.

This was grammatically better and more focused than this author's previous sequel attempt. It is concerning that he seems to write the husband as self righteous with religious overtones, even moreso this time, leading to triple homicide and further abandonment and traumatization of the three children all because he was cuckolded. Hopefully this is just the author writing fantasy fiction and not reflecting and projecting their issues and inner beliefs.

Piece of crap story!! Posted in the wrong place…. Should have been in Horror or maybe not posted at all!!