by pjtown8
PJ....so many spelling and homonym errors..... maybe a little too much irrelevant info.... good basic plot.... keep writing...
Could be a decent story, but there are too many grammar and punctuation errors to let the story move along easily.
The writing is a bit "Then we did this, then we did that" in style. It needs to flow a bit more.
Thank you readers for the feedback. I was going to add additional chapters but from the comments, the story needs to be edited. I will be taking down these two chapter. I don't really have time to edit, but hopefully I can get back to them.
Sincerely,
Pj
Idk why people care so much about the bullshit of grammar . I can understand it just fine and the story is amazing ! Now the story is delayed because people are so fuckin picky . Anyways ! Love where the story is heading and I hope for a new chapter soon !!!
It is true that the spelling and grammar could use some work, and I am not sure about the timing because evening and morning get mixed up, but the plot is super interesting. Please keep going through this. Don't take it down keep going. If some people don't want to read it, that is their problem. I want to know what happens next!
Hello Readers,
I just wanted to thank you again for the feedback and I have good news. It is very true that it has been a decade since I wrote lengthy passages and had to be observant of grammar. However, I now have an individual who is willing to help me edit. I will personally be looking over my work prior to posting it as well. So for right now the chapters are being edited. Also I don't know what I can do about my writing style but hopefully as the story continues it will get better.
Thank You
Pj
Hello Readers,
Thank you for patiently waiting for the next chapter. The next chapter has been submitted to Literotica and it is still pending. Sometime it takes a week for them to get around to approving it. So again thank you for reading this story and the feedback.
With Love,
P.J.
Too many inconsistencies
Who buys stuff for their fridge before a10am class having to leave in car all day
Female professor says good evening and then they go to lunch
On her way to a 2pm class the legal aid says good evening
And multiple grammar issues
Frustrating read
Hello Parttimereader,
Thank You for the feedback. This chapter was a bit difficult, although I did have one of Literotica Editors revise the first few chapters. So it let me know that even they can miss something. As for you not being able to continue, feel free to stop at anytime. However, I hope the next few chapters will be better for you. I can't promise you anything though...I never do ;-).
Sincerely,
PJ