All Comments on 'To Save a Marriage'

Nice story and not one I can recall reading anything else similar. Thank You. A bit more about the twins would complete the picture for me ... one way or another!

Good job, 4**** it was only missing a more solid ending.

Someone needs a new best friend. And someone needs a better story line than this trash.

Such a cliche ending sort of spoiled it. Would have been better if she divorced him because she missed the strange cock too much and Carl really had to pay the price for his repeated infidelity with her.

A brave submission, trust me I know from recent experience.

You had me until the trite "divorce hubby no. 1 and marry the buddy" ending. This ensures a lot of BTB comments, I'm guessing. Please ignore them, and continue the good writing, even if I sometimes disagree with your plot twists. Bound to be better than my tentacle monster idea, that ensured pissing off two constituencies.

"There were two big juicy stakes on the table for each of them"? Dinner for vampires?

Nicely done.

I just don't know if I like it though.

Well it was not Bryan's fault anyway.

Carl deserved what he got.

I think a lot of people here are forgetting that this is just fantasy. To make some of the stories you read on this website, they're not going to have realistic plots. I enjoyed this very much, it was a clever story and I'm glad he didn't just agree with sleeping with her right away (that would've been unrealistic), and it had a great sex scene when it finally happened. Excellent job.

@mattenw: There are a lot of storys on this site, where wifes think that fucking other man for revenge saves the marriage. So this is no new concept. The nearly new thing is the husband asking the best friend.

But as soon as the husband had to ask the friend either the marriage or the friendship is doomed - or both.

Both sides breaking their marriage vows will never work, it just adds more fuel to the fire.

It happens I guess. Thanks

Editing problems in a few places, but not too bad, per se. You rushed things along too fast in my opinion. Some of the narrative was awkward as well, although the main story arc was interesting. 3*

I was surprised, but I actually found myself hating the wife. I kept thinking that she had put the friend into an awful position for a very immature reason. The eventual divorce did not surprise me, but I think he was thinking with the little head to marry her.

Good story! Well-written!!! 5/5!!!

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Yes, as Cap'n Obvious and others pointed out, it's NOT original, but there are only X-number of ways to write a cheatin' wife story. It's what you do with what you have that counts! 5/5

That deserves a well round ROFLMAO.

Not horrid but that i s not a saving grace.

Not a fan. She needed a better husband and better best friend. 3 Stars.

His best friend should not have done it, but at least it changed the divorce from ugly to amicable. His best friend certainly should not have married his friend ex wife --- but it does happen.

Stupid people have fucked up lives. The biggest question is how did these two misfits ever get married in the first place? At least they split before they polluted the gene pool with their spawn. Hope they all have better relationships going forward. Which is very likely, since none of them have anywhere to go but up. What crap for a life!

Thanks for the effort.

I don't know who is more in the wrong here between the husband and wife, I'm glad the main character didn't just say yes immediately, that would've been unrealistic and made him look like an jerk for wanting to immediately fuck his friends wife. At least there was a build up to the reason why he finally chose to do it.

Great story, and I enjoyed the sex scene a lot. Keep up the good work.

Nice to have a "happily ever after", they DO happen IRL. You did this with a deft touch. PLEASE continue.

Just a lot of cheating, with no character worth caring about.

the husband should have took the divorce and move on. He clearly wasn't the marring type. And the wife knew it and still got her revenge.

This is just nuts! Bryan’s initial talk with Lauren should have included something like this: ‘I realize that you think he should feel the pain of betrayal by a best friend, but you’ve now involved me in a situation I wasn’t involved in. Do you understand that you’re making me do something against my nature? Something I loathe? How it would impact my self image?’

Great read with a good twist at the end. I did not think Laura and Carl's marriage was going to last, it was a messed up relationship. But at least it worked out for everyone at the end.

Fun story with a happy ending for everyone involved despite the situation they were all in! Thank you!

"two big juicy stakes [sic] on the table" Why stakes? So the two men can stab themselves in the heart to end the vampirism of their friendship? Or did you man steaks?

""What do you mean you're a divorce?" said Bryan. What a bizarre thing for someone to be.

Don't know why everyone here is pissed at Lauren for wanting some fun of her own. Her husband repeatedly cheated on her and she was very forgiving. She just wanted a little action of her own to make up for it. But it worked out for everyone at the end regardless of the situation.

good story, but the sex was pg-13. Wish you had been more explicit in the sex. This reminds me of TV -- when they cut the scene just when it gets interesting

Good story. A little lite on the erotic side but worth 5 stars

Overlooking all the unforced errors, two things stood out. I can understand two beers for each of them. Okay. But two steaks for each of them? How could they perform sexually after eating two steaks each? Even so, I awarded three stars. The difference between two and three is mercy.

@ previous anonymous. It was meant to suggest there were two beers, one for each person, and two steaks, one for each person. But I admit I messed up those lines.

A little rushed. You can write but need an editor. At the end I get the impression you had to finish and much break was nearly over..... Thanks for writing. I'll go find more of your work.

Enjoyed the story, yes there were the odd grammar issues but the sentence context could still be understood.

I can never understand how people continually demean writers here on LIT. If the writer were paid, or more importantly if the readers had to pay, then so be it - grammar would be expected.

I'm a tech writer/content editor and trust me, I've seen far worse contributions in the commercial/private sectors.

Anyway, well done.

Good scenario, but the sex scenes felt devoid of passion or feeling - it was too mechanical. Let us feel, hear, taste, smell - all of it. The ending also felt too rushed. What was there was nice, though. 4*