All Comments on 'Todd, Fuck Your Mother.'

That certainly got the juices flowing, love your stories.

....have I read this before?

very good, very well written. And yes, would love to see more chapters. They should get to know their neighbors better

This was really hot, nice work! they should involve Pam on the fun too, maybe even have a group session with Milla and William in future chapters.

All mothers and sons should experience such uninhibited love. A beautiful twist of mother/son neighbors, can't wait for mother/son/daughter.

This is an amazingly erotic story, super hot. It has so much potential, I'd totally love to see it evolve into a multi chapter novel. Please, please go on and please add Pamela in the next chapter! Pamela needs to be integrated! Thank you very much!

Re: is it complete as is or should there be additional chapters?

The strength of this story is the long, slow, progression, of coming together of the watching couple. His patience, her reluctance. The smoldering passion on show nextdoor, the plodding and unemotional degradation of the physical relationship between the aroused wife and couch potato husband.

We could almost hear the soundtrack supplied by Ravel in the background.

Now that Mother and Son have yielded to their desires by consummating their union a 2nd chapter would become a diary of their coupling. The only tension would be from trying to stay hidden. The curiosity of the daughter/sister, the couple nextdoor, his mates, and the lump watching Wrestling could provide near discovery scenarios. And of course there could be a chronicle of the positions and locations utilized by the happy revelers.

I think your first instinct is correct, it should stand as is.

This has to be one of the best stories on all of Literotica!

This story could have more chapters because she has more obstructions with her affair: husband, daughter, etc. Mila & William are alone (no husband mentioned)

Good Story

I loved this story! I would enjoy some more chapters and look forward to reading more of your stories.

it is very good as is, however, it would be equally as good with a couple additional chapters.

Such a hot story, I have enjoyed a lot of your writings. I would love to see Pamela added and definitely Milla and William. Great beginning to a potentially hot series of chapters ahead.

Using this sentence from your story, "People sometimes vary where they have sex, change locations, it spices things up.", I'd like to suggest mother and son take the game further.

Maybe an introduction to a college bar scene when mom asks about current dating rituals of his generation. A slow seduction in the parking lot where someone else is watching them.

Continue the story, 6f27

Excellent story with a great build up. There so many different story continuation possibilities. I hope you will do another chapter or two.

All mothers and sons should experience such uninhibited love

Hope you add Pam in as well

Another MA classic! Five plus stars and a favorite point. I most certainly vote for future chapters. Pam should join Natalie and Todd for chapter two. Maybe an all girls chapter with Natalie, Pam and Milla for chapter three. Natalie/Todd and Milla/William together for chapter four. And to get him into the spirit, for chapter five Pammie seduces and fucks her dad.

I'd suggest you keep it in the family but wouldn't be disappointed if you included Pam's friends from college.

Awesome 🌈

Please more to cum .....

Add Pam - definitely.

Maybe a swap with Milla and William?

This is indeed a very erotic piece leaving us wanting for more. I really do hope to see more of this story-line and yes, do add in Pam. Her friends? Not so sure if I want them in on the incest orgy but if you can pull it off nicely, why not! Milla and William? As long as it is not a total mindless orgy more reminiscent of Porn w/o Plot, I feel it could potentially be awesome. Good job as usual my friend, Keep up the good work and I hope to see more of your captivating works...

J. Jamie Dupane

Loved your new story......Pam needs to join in soon....then maybe a 4 some with the neighbors who started it all!!!

Please, continue with more of this story. You have done a great job.

It closely mirrors the plot of "A View to a Thrill," though that started with one boy bragging to the other and inviting him to watch through the window(*).

As to whether to continue, I'd say no. The entire draw of an origin story, for lack of a better term, is the ratcheting of tension. Once the crescendo has been built to and the barrier broken, all that's left is cataloguing of repetitious encounters, each less compelling than the last; diminishing returns.

Sure, you could add others to the mix, but in this instance that would involve "building" in the wrong direction. While technically mother-son-daughter is an escalation over mother-son, the mother's involvement would rightly be viewed as the biggest obstacle, so following that with a lesser breach is necessarily less compelling; Pam's not the authority figure and has already expressed some level of interest. If she sensed Natalie giving her the green light, there's nothing to progress toward; the domino just falls, and what follows is a laundry list of acts rather than a *story* building to a climax. (This goes for Milla and William as well. Getting involved with another mother-son pair is a much smaller leap than crossing the line into incest in the first place.)

At best, the possibility could have been used as a button on the end of the original story: Natalie, based on their conversations, suggests Pam might be amenable to joining in; Todd does a spit take; the end. You provide the promise of escalation without having to pull off the near-impossible and actually deliver on it in a satisfying way.

(*) It also ends with such a "button"; the daughter stumbles upon the mother and son, then sneaks out of the house and drives away, only to turn around when she realizes there's nothing stopping her from joining in. This was actually used as the impetus for a sequel that failed in the way I describe.

Please continue

they continue, daughter joins in and then they swap with mother and son next door

I love how you drew the reader in from the first paragraph, and then took your time with the long slow build up between mom and son. 5*s

Definitely 1or 2 more chapters.

Keep up the good work. Love your writing style.

We want MORE! After a chapter or two more, somehow the two couples (William & his mother and Todd an his mother) will go away for the weekend to "check out some colleges". Or some such.

And perhaps just happen to switch sons.

And how would Todd's sister fit in. She already suspects something.

I'll leave the writing to you, you do have just the touch and style we need on Literotica.

♥

HC

As soon as half of first page, got a strong feeling that I have read this story before...and came to check the comments if somebody else felt the same way or knew about this..and i was right.

It's an awesome story but adding Pam to soon is not what you want to do in my opinion. I think maybe a set watch in person of the milla and William. Maybe the mom or Pam sees tod with a college girl and gets hotter for him. There a lot more story lines but I think putting Pam in the next one is a rush.

I think that your story is perfectly complete just as you have left it. Mom and son have reached that ultimate goal and are headed for a long and loving life together. If they are careful, everything should be totally fulfilling for both. I don't like the idea of adding Todd's sister to the equation. That would be unfaithful to his beloved mother; she should be his only sex partner, because she should be the only one that he really desires as a lover. As a young man, I had a terrific crush on my mother (never consummated), and I had a beautiful sister 2 years younger than me. I would have been in constant raptures if I could have fucked Mom over and over again, but that feeling for her left no room for any sexual desire for my sister. My dear sweet Mom would be all I would ever need.

the inevitable sequel, I hope. Then Pammie can fuck Dad. Then they all share a pool party with Mila and William...

How many mothers and sons in our neighborhoods are having sexual relations with each other? That is probably going to remain unknown. But you make us think about it and that's fine. I love Oedipal stories and I love the ones with more than one mother and son in the mix even more! And it is sweeter and more wicked when it all goes on behind dad's back!!

If this is the beginning of a series, quite frankly, I'd rather see sister Pam get it on with mom than dad. That is just how I roll.

Really nice build up and pay off to a sexy idea. If I may answer the author note at the start: keep this focused on Todd and his mom. Make them get bolder on their escapades before adding anyone. The mom can enjoy feeling desired for a bit longer and Todd can get a taste of being the man of the house.

You decide where you want this to go. It is your story. I would think that the next thing that happened would be letting their neighbors in on their secret, perhaps at a pool party with only the four of them. (No swapping.) Chapter 3 could bring the sister in on the secret. But do things the way you would see them happening instead of what others might want, even if that means stopping here.

This story is so good,as is most of your others. Hope you continue, seems many other options to be explored

Great story, fun characters, and lots of hot parts. I gave you a solid five.

That being said, there were some issues to look out for. Sentence structure that was clunky and awkward a few times, a few typos, but nothing very bad. Just try and find someone to edit before you're ready to post.

Great story, keep it up!!

Afraid your phrasing lost me, making it hard to easily follow. How does a person, "take a den"

What a great, well paced tease. Realistic dialogue that brings each character into focus. A scorching climax. A sad ironic parallel. Hubby watches wrestling through dull neutered eyes. Mom and Todd fuel their passion through the sight of real lovers. Much better than the average lit fix here. Beautiful work.

Mommy got all hot and buggered. Mommies cunnie craved more sweet cream. I HAD to be mommies champion once more. we shopped and chatted about the true nature of this art of splendor. Mother and her new baby HAD to have conceive another future of feminized internal orgasm as Todd (now Tammi) became aroused by this story. Mommy opened her wet labia and engulfed the feminized . "Cum deeply in Mother" Tammi jerked and spasmed as she jettisoned a fertile "Motherload".It was thrilling. Learning more about this initial true Mother-Daughter desire, the two continued years of legendary coitus. A family of loving inter-family desire bred by all in a respected family bent on loving, lust and of course, the pursuit of happiness.

I don't know any mothers who would fuck their sons, but I have read real-life versions where it's happened. The way your characters interact, I can see such a relationship forming. It flows as if natural. Fine work! Now maybe the women can confide in each other and maybe swap sons?

Daughter catches them! And wants brother for herself.

Seems as the goal with this story is to belittle and bash on the father.

Absolute rubbish. Went on and on and on and on. Like looking in a cake shop window without the dime to buy!!!

But definitely needs a part 2.

I dont understand the negative comments, the story was good, nice build up and well paced. But i do think it meeds at least 1 follow up, hopefully more. Her friend definitely needs to find out, maybe have a group thing with the 4 of them. No need for swapping, but it wouldnt be bad. And if it gies further than 1 follow up definitely bring in Pam.

Great story! Got me wanting to fuck my mom. Would love to read more well told stories. Keep writing !!! ME!!

I don't understand the negative comments about the story. I thought it was sexy & erotic. Very well written (no stupid words like cummed or grinded).

my usual interest but well written and one follows why she goes there!

good story. could be improved with a little more detailed sex.

Makes me wish I had a son to make love to. Hope there will be more parts.

Definitely need another chapter or two. I'm of the opinion that the next chapter should involve Pam catching the two of them in the act and then being brought into the fun

Maybe in chapter 3 we could find out that William and Milla knew all along that they were being watched and had planned the whole thing with Todd to seduce his mother. Thanks for the fun read.

*****

M51

And i totally agree with others. At least another chapter would be really pleasurable.

This one needs a sequel.

I really like it, it need at least another chapter. Maybe the chapter 2 would be Milla/William discovering them, and chapter 3 would be Pam turn.

like commentators before I feel this story needs a second part. There is that detail about the phone that rings immediately after the neighbours have finished their round.

The boys have been talking and William knows Todd is watching, calls him afterwards about it. Now, as things have progressed at home, Todd feels obliged to return the favour William (and unknowingly, Milla) gave him, by providing a show for them.

The moms need to talk. Maybe more than just talk.

An afternoon at the pool. Swapping sons. Pam finally finds it out.

second chapter of Todd, Fuck Your Mother, I believe I finally devised a sequel. I do caution that it will be some months before it is ready. I am now in the process of editing two stories, one that explores what happens when a son discovers his mother's indiscretion, the other that concerns a young botanist who discovers a plant with some unusual psychoactive properties.

Please take a look at Ricardo and Juliana, my submission to the National Nude Day contest.

I do want to thank the Literotica universe for its response to and interest in my stories in general and to Todd, Fuck Your Mother in particular.

Such a great story,,and well written,,and for me the last sentence says it all.

i had to read part 1 before 2 - Fantastic. what a great tease. and great sex at the end. can't wait to read chapter 2. 5 stars!!

Now I don't need to wait for the next EPISODE.

Excellent story. Fantastic way you started the story and built up to an AWESOME CLIMAX.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

when there is hesitation and a build up it is always more erotic than a simple fuck and this tale does that superbly.

Now on to part 2.

Just about the perfect scenario: a loyal but frustrated mom, a son who has a plausible path to being the kind of lover she wants. Great build up. 5*

These are the stories I love - the build is intense and believable until it explodes in a fit of hard fucking. Definitely a 5-star story. I noticed that despite you saying this was probably a one-and-done story, you wrote a second chapter. Cannot wait to see what happens with Todd and his mother next.

Todd ! go fuck your mother. In return my reply yes yes yes. good read Thanks

I gave you 5 stars based on the quality of the story. Very good build-up and ending.

If I had to rate on your writing style, I would give you a 1 or 2. I had to re-read several sentences that run on and on with structure out of place. It was almost like trying to read an erotic tale written by Yoda.

I'm sending you feedback privately. I hope you understand that my feedback to help you become a better writer. Your story is good. Your style and structure need work.

Wow! This pushed quite a few of my buttons.

Thanks for a good one handed read.

Had just about given up finding any really good writing on this site, that is -- until I discovered your stuff. Hope you'll continue writing. You're superb!

Very good. Practical approach.

Great story, Mary!

Thanks for sharing; on to part 2.

Great Story, loved it as is but would love more. It was a very pleasant change to read from the woman's perspective. I will definitely be reading more of your stories.

fantastically, fiery hot!

Wonderful. So well done. The construction, motivation, and flow were exceptional. All benefited from the author's woman's perspective. Thank you.

Steamy!

Good job, thanks for sharing your work.

OMG just amazingly hot! Great character development and highly erotic. This is the second story that have read by MA and once I am recharged I will visit part 2 of this jewel. Thank you!

Good story. Enjoy mutually consensual mother/son incestpus love stories. Indepth character development separates a good story from a great syory. As for this story, it is to be determined if the mother truly wants her son as a lover or is simply jealous of her neighbor. If both people are trying, I do not understand why a husband quits trying unless he has no sexual imagination or his equipment has quit working.

Great build up to the final act. Well done.

Nagyon tetszett, de túl lassan jutottak el a baszáshoz, de legalább végre megtörtént. Várom a folytatást és remélem lesz hármas vagy négyes is.

Excellent!

Damn! I am 56 and I ... er ... got over-excited twice. And I hard ... um ... can ... well ... I hope you get the picture. Fantastic story that is so hot it will burn Hades to the ground. Thanks!

Outstanding story. Damn hot! About to read chapter two.