All Comments on 'Together In The Dark'

Loved it! Well written. More, please!

Lukas

That was a hot and erotic story, good job ,bud.

nice

Great. Loved it! Keep writing.

good story but there were three errs

1)when the power went out and he went to his room you said he turned on his reading lamp not likely with the power out

2)when the power went out you said the water stopped yet they got in the shower after she sucked him off and turned the water on if it went off with the power it couldn't be turned on again until the power came back on

3)when they were fucking you said he was in her til there pubic hair was touching yet you say later that when she started to come and he really started to pump that he took her virginity no way if he was in her far enough for there pubic hair to mesh then he had already taken her virginity

please keep things straight and do some research and keep notes so you don't goof again

no background a rush to sex and no end just another wannabe writer posting a short middle of a story. this is more like an outline than a story delete and rewrite and do it right this time.

It's great when a sister takes the initiative in fucking her brother. Jessica has a "thing" about her brother Dan's meaty young cock. She loves handling it, sucking on it, and, most of all, getting it stuffed up her cute little cunt. Dan, of course, is delighted to go along with the program. He knows that his stiff fat cock will fit his sweet sister's sweet little twat like a hand in a glove--after all, they're brother and sister. As kids they used to play together in happy abandon. Now, well, they're not kids anymore, as Jessica's dripping wet twat and Dan's big throbbing hard on show. So Dan sticks his big prick up the hole between his sis's legs, plows her hot hole, and blows his brotherly balls up his sister's cunt. Dan and Jessica both know that up a sister's cunt is where a brother's creamy semen belongs.

Another writer that hasn't a clue about female anatomy.