All Comments on 'Tomeric: The Kiss Ch. 02'

a Dictaphone, cassette recorder, whatever,

The Number of words that are Mis-Spelled is horrendous. and make no mistake, they are like tree-roots (or three-routes) on the path of reading.

. .lower back was soar (soar as in eagle?)

. .peculiar bowl movement (whisking eggs in it?)

. .been really horny not too (not to (with one'o')

and that was from the first two paragraphs.

So, either you typed them this way, or a pay by the hour typist decided to let them through. Either way, you look bad.

Please read your work before submitting, please, and then get someone else to read it, someone who will pick you up on inappropriate words.

Yours

Kilroy

and needs a vicious spanking!

is that who it is suposed to be? what a hot fucking whore slut YESSS!