All Comments on 'Too Good Too Bad'

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BuckeyebobBuckeyebobover 3 years ago
Long introduction

Not much story. Hubby is a drunk, wife is a slut, whore, boss is an asshole. End of story so far.

26thNC26thNCover 4 years ago

Not too good, just really, really,bad.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
gay earth

fuck this peic of shet story and fuck this gay world

PATHETHIC FUKEN NIGER

dreamer3366dreamer3366over 6 years ago
Huh?

This was so badly written, I was confused as to what was going on.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
1*

another illiterate WHORE posting cuck SHIT.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
What an idiotic bunch of cuck crap!!!

Whats amazing at that crap?? She has all the relatives at her home and is dressed like a slut??? Interesting! And then she fucks his boss and acts like the real slut she is!! Why is she married?? Without her husband she can live her dream as a whore and get payed for it!! Idiotic slut/cuck crap!!!

EspressoBolusEspressoBolusover 6 years ago
Three stars for being brave enough to post!

The first problem I see in this first effort is in the set up. You have the narrator say;

"Jack is the homemaker and I am the one who brings money home and this happened just a few months back."

Then you describe the husband coming home from work.

I like the description of a ski trip as a "nicely icy hilly destination".

The bully BOSS is pretty unreal, but no more so than the other characters I suppose. Keep writing, you will get better!

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Terrible!

you not only need an editor but also a writer.

lust4biglust4bigover 6 years agoAuthor
First story.....My apologize

Will not make you all upset in next story

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
typical indian desi

definitely an indian writer from his vocabulary .....

Impo_64Impo_64over 6 years ago
What was this?

What was this? "So, you like kissing your new BOSS while his husband is out in the living room?"! Was the boss married to a man? They allow that in India? And "He asked me "WHO'S SLUT I AM?"...So after all the Boss was a gay slut! An awful plot added to a fucked up writing, could only result in a shitty story...1* (where are the negative ratings when we need them?)

MattblackUKMattblackUKover 6 years ago
This is written in Indian English, I think?

The real clue was the tickets for the "nicely icy hilly destination."

Plus the Indian English grammar construction.

A fair first effort, but do get an editor to help you out.

rixelsrixelsover 6 years ago
A Short Betrayal

Kind of bad Cuckold Haiku

lust4biglust4bigover 6 years agoAuthor
Thanks

I will keep this in mind and will try to be good in next upload

francis_toliverfrancis_toliverover 6 years ago
won't comment on content

But I will say that it appears that English is not your first language. Unfortunately that makes the story very difficult to read.

A kind editor might help.

Good on you for getting a story written and putting it out there, regardless of content.

No vote as the language barrier was so large.

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