by starscape
I am really enjoying this story, such a refreshingly different story line, and this chapter made me laugh (I appreciate a bit of humor with my erotica). And now with the introduction of the villagers and the stolen children plot, I can't wait for your next chapter!
Yves
The only thing that could make it more satisfying is if it were already completed. Keep it coming.
Very interesting story.
I have been following for a while and I like this doom and gloom of stories like this, up to now reminds me a bit of Equilibrium or Aeon Flux.
Now in this chapter I would have liked a bit more expanse on the ruins outside the city there, for something entirely new to the characters the story glossed it over too much for my liking, even with the dire circumstances.
I understand you maybe want to keep this nonspecific, but was quite interested in finding out more about it ;)
Very intriguing start. I felt a little like I was watching 'Lost' for a bit there :) but I really like where it is going. I'm excited that you've brought another aspect of this plot in mentioning children stolen from the 'outliers'. I'm glad it's not as simple as they find these people and that's it. I really want to see the City dwellers taken down or at least shaken up a bit! Lookin forward to more!