All Comments on 'Toying with Hailey'

WOW. Outstanding.

Good premise.

Sex is too automatic. Too mechanical. Lacks slow buildup.

Need more teasing/foreplay/playing with each other. Needed some tension. Needed exploration of each other's bodies.

And you wrote PEAKING when you meant PEEKING.

Four stars.

Now that's a good story!

Nice slow build-up, the sex was erotic and sensual.

Hopefully there will be more!

Very nice, but didn't care for the ending, thought there should have been a path forward together.

Good story. Not quite the end though. Left open for a lot more in college.

Well Done ! ! !

Hoping we get another chapter; college life?

The writing is fantastic and the characters believable but the love seemed a little too quick. Liked the connection between the siblings but not the toys. However, those are personal preferences. Overall great work, could use a little more of describing why they loved each other. 4.5/5

Why big sis is suddenly beginning to break a taboo and get intimate with younger brother, is a mystery for the reader.

Waiting on the follow up when they attend same college and move in together. And the parents confirm there life and accept it. And or decide to do swapping between kids. Anyway well done I hope it continues you left the doors wide open for it

Can't wait for college chapters, ideas could be social dating together, the pill not working, pregnancy dilemma, abortion or keep the baby, two alternate scenarios ending.

Fantastic sexy story so far. More please when they are living together and making babies.