All Comments on 'Transman & His Twin Sister'

This is my first story ever so I'm sure there's a lot to be improved

The fact that one of the two characters is trans has no bearing on the story, other than the author wanting point out what they believed makes them, the author, special.

The story line could have been at least interesting, if there had been anything interesting written about the story line.

"I fingered my twin sister to orgasm."

I just re-wrote your story to make it better.

It wasn't more or less interesting. What made it better was that it wasted less of the reader's time

Two stars instead of one only because there were few errors in the mechanics of the writing

Our some character development into your writing. These two are totally lacking motivation for the single scene. Make them people, not just cardboard cutouts.

If you want to write about trans people, go for it, but make it have a reason for being in the story.m, not just that you want to see how it is accepted as part of your personal validation.

That's fair. It's been years since I wrote narrative stuff and I didn't do any revising or anything, just kinda threw it out there. Definitely things to work on for the future

Don’t listen to that salty weirdo, it was a good story. I just wish it was longer and that there was some reciprocation, but I suppose that gives you something to write about next time.