All Comments on 'Trap Site that Trapped Me Ch. 04'

So scattered and disjointed that I could not be bothered to finish reading it.

It has its flaws such as some errors with past and present tense and incorrect words used but those are minor problems. I liked the story and found certain parts to be very erotic and sexually deviant which is another plus for this story. You should probably get a proofreader since most authors tend to skim their work when proofreading and editing so they miss a lot. You only have 10 stories posted so you undoubtedly learn from your mistakes and grow as a writer but the main thing is you have a vivid imagination and that is something a good writer cannot create without one. Good luck and please keep writing.