by Ironiclaconic
...on the twist. Amber reads the babysitter texts. Confesses to Dawn that it reflects her feelings. Dawn informs hubby, gives him permission to allow the babysitter to "seduce" him (while she secretly watches?).
Anyway, great 5 star story as is.
Paul in Oklahoma
I understand reconciliation from a single drunken mistake. And the lack of trust from the wife. However there was no progress.... She kept him in limbo and should have either ended it or started rebuilding. Instead she took the path of entrapment and severe emotional abuse. Frankly I would be done with her; I would not care to get to know the "new" Dawn if that is what she is now.
I think it's brilliant and COMPLETELY disagree, his wife tested him as she should have. Likely this person cheated themselves and resent needing anything but an apology and empty promise to move on. What a great story!!
But I think I would probably end the whole marriage at that point. I can see getting past a drunken mistake, but her treatment of him was way over the line. Disrespect. Lying. Manipulation.
Thanks!
As has been said, well thought out and written, and I applaud that it is in such a way that the ending is a total surprise.
I also agree that I read to have a Love rather than Hate reasoning in the writing as often I discount entire authors when -forgive the pun- Hate is so in your face.
Well done,
Now let's see, what was that comment about Amber being in other stories....
The story is a combination of firsts for me: first story to be *this* meta (I'm reading a story on a website in which the main character is reading a story on the same website about his babysitter having sex with himself), and first story to make me so far lost in the story until the punchline. Even though the story is as impossible as those porn videos about babysitters to be real, the ending is appropriate and loving. Please write more!
Clever. Hope he knocks her up a few more times. Good story.
WOW! !
I am so happy that you wrote this. It's very rare to read about a relationship was and can continue to be a happy and enduring relationship.
Staggeringly good story. Such a rarity to see the guy not being a total asshole in the end. Thank you
I didn't think Literotica actually permitted a story where the husband resisted the nubile, willing, 18-year-old babysitter. I always thought an algorithm screened them out. Granted that most of us are dogs, or have stong canine tendencies, but surely some male could get enough blood to his brain to think through the situation to its logical and inevitably grim conclusion.
Ok, the voice-changer was a tiny bit hokey, but by that time I was completely hooked on the story. Heck, I even used to buy the latex mask thing on Mission Impossible.
I even bought her having to "test" him after his infidelity. Would that most husbands got that kind of test before we suffered temptation. Knowing a wife would participate in such a fantasy without declaring you a degenerate pervert would probably preempt some from feeling like straying.
Very well written. I like your writing style very much and the story - the second of yours I've read - has that delicious sting in the tail. Congratulations and please continue.
Just BRILLIANT!
I love the crossover character & reference to your other story with the marriage counselor! Pure genius! ~
Usually I don't read any stories longer than two because they bore me. Read this all the way through though! Wonderful story. Keep writing!
Top-rated all the way! I am so glad you've decided to share more with us than just that one "pretentious" one... ;)
A great set-up, an ingenious twist and a happy ending! Congrats on a really great story!
I read all the way to the end... despite finishing earlier. That almost never happens.