All Comments on 'Trials of Enchantress Ch. 01'

No woman wants to be a whore! She has the power to escape. Her not using it, now that is unbelievable.

That is a very valid criticism. Is there anything else that breaks your suspension of disbelief?

To be honest I am not even a native English speaker, let alone a writer, (a tech person by trade really) so any tips on character development or proper world building would be appreciated.