All Comments on 'Trip to Chicago Ch. 02: Jackie'

and on the side: The woman David fucked in the Hotel, was his brother's mistress..

Too bad this is in the wrong category. I do want to see what happens when you reveal the mistress.

Very good story, but I can't help but feel that you left the story unfinished. I hope that you tell us what happened. I have a feeling that David slept with his brother's wife and girlfriend.

Woodbgood

ABSOLUTELY SMOOTH AND ALMOST ROMANTIC

Jackie you slut. David is a manwhore

I am disappointed that David did not have a deeper loyalty to Dana. But I cannot fault the author for not writing the story I desired in the way I desired it. The depiction of David’s lovemaking with Nickie was disturbingly similar to his lovemaking with Dana — as if they were interchangeable. Will, as others have been suggesting, there be further installments to wrap the strands together?

Good Story, well told, dialog has a credible flow. The reader can easily visualize the story. Thanks