All Comments on 'Trouble'

Good characters and character development. Simple but interesting story most can relate to. Could use a tad more sexual tension and drama.

I liked this story. It was well written, very original, at times humorous and realistic. The author has a good grasp of the English language with very mature vocabulary. Now I wonder what Jessica's reaction to the story was. Maybe a sequel?

THE ASIGNNMENT COULD HAVE BEEN: PREPARE IN NO MORE THAN TWO PAGES A SET UP FOR A BEGINING TO A ROMANTIC SHORT STORY. SO, THAT IS PRETTY MUCH WHAT WE GOT; A GOOD IF GENERIC PRESENTATION OF COMING OF AGE, A PREQUEL TO A LOVE STORY? <P>

THE SETTING IS FAMILIAR (BUT WE NEED TO WRITE ABOUT WHAT WE KNOW) THE ANXST, SELF DOUBT AND SOCIAL AWKWARDNESS ARE WELL BLENDED WITH THE OCCASIONAL WITISSM. EVERY THING SCREAMS OF BEING AT THE CASP OF LIFE AND ROMANCE IS IN THE AIR - BUT NOT QUITE, JUST AT THE EDGE AND STILL LOOKING FROM OUTSIDE, NOT READY TO HOLD MORE THAN ONE SENTENCE CONVERSATION WITH THE ELLUSIVE HEART THROB (NOT TO MENTION HOLD HER IN HIS ARMS)... <p>

WHEN YOU ARE READY (AFTER THE FINALS?) I'D LOVE TO READ YOUR VALENTINE STORY.