All Comments on 'Trying to Get that Promotion'

Great story.

Well. id say fantastic because it is fantastic.

Nicely done. There were a few errors, but nothing serious, and Word/Google Docs and Grammarly would get most of them. If you want to improve your writing style, then you need a compromise between the French ‘original’ and the English in terms of sentence length and flow. Look at what you have written, and reimagine it in French. The sentences would be a little longer, and the flow would be better between them - currently they’re a little stilted. I believe you wrote the majority of this directly in English - it doesn’t read like a translation - so you are already most of the way there. Thanks.

Thanks all for the comments. But especially for the anonymous commenter that made some very insightful comments about my writing style. Really really appreciated.

My wife found this and we both enjoyed it tremendously. Your English is very good and the story was captivating. We especially enjoyed the sense of humor and playfulness that was woven into the plot. The ending was a real delight!

My wife related to your story. She once spend a weekend with my boss to get me a raise. And she fucked one of her bosses for six months to avoid being laid off.

Nice story. Please keep writing!