by JukeboxEMCSA
A fun, if somewhat unrealistic, little short story. Very enjoyable and well written, while also being very easy to read. Reminds me of a similar hypnosis I love to incorporate into chess. I hope to read more from you in the future.
Nothing wrong with one page, in my book. Closer lines like that always feel kinda unnecessary and somehow off-putting, to me, but otherwise, I enjoyed it!
Ignore the previous comment, criticism is only useful when it's constructive. This had an interesting perspective, and for that I give you points, but it's too bad that I doubt it'll have a sequel. I enjoyed it, 4/5 stars.