All Comments on 'Turning 40.'

She is going to swear to never drink again... Of course that will be after the divorce, and losing all of her friends.

Fucking terrible

The timeline doesn't make any sense. She stayed at the Bar talking with Joe and till the bar emptied then she came home to a surprise party at what 3 AM?

Feeling down, flirts a little, but trying to get away from the guy, he follows her, and now her marriage is wrecked. Quite the downer!

Glad we have Covid to cheer us up!

Can’t tell who would be more surprised in this situation, but I don’t have to guess who will suffer more damage. Another stupid cheating wife, and another great story.

on whether lover boy Joe sticks around?

It was ok but spiked by just leaving it their

Nice ending!

5

Good start to a story with potential, too bad you wasted it on one of these dumb 750 word challenges.

It’s been a couple of years. I’ve been a fan ever since’The Empty Nest’. Good to see your new story posted. Poignant piece! Thanks much.

Dumb bitch, deserves everything coming her way

But, but, but...no one cares about me!! LMFAO!! Another midlife crisis wife bites the dust. Nice flash story!!

Wow *5*

Wonder if it was her first/last time cheating... oh well - cat's out of the bag now.

5/5

"Joe bought me a third despite my discouragement." - He can BUY a 3rd, you don't have to drink it!

From her putting herself into a bad mood, to the trouble she created, to her discovery, it was a path of her own creation. Good job!

This has been done before but not exactly like this. Short and to the point.

Thanks for keeping it real. Could almost see it coming but you times it perfectly.

No explanation who Joe was. Friend? coworker? Or did the martian slut ray that hit her have her accept a stranger. Other than that a good story. 5 stars

Good story! Thanks for the read.

Classic case of the poor insecure bored wife and mother who was turning 40 and feeling she deserved more attention then what she was getting from her husband, family and friends.

So, apparently the only thing she could think to do to improve her self esteem and confidence is get drunk and fuck another man not her husband. It was all going so well. The strange dick was so hot to fuck her he took standing up against the wall just inside the front door of her humble abode. Then the lights went on and there was a loud shout of SUPERSIZE from the gathered guests. It was then the realization hit her that she truly was FUCKED.

Just didn't work for me, maybe if it was longer and more descriptive.

Nice twist but can't figure out if she was raped or not...

Wow! LoL.

Short, sweet and hit the nail on the head! Great story

That was one hell of a twist! I loved it!!!!

Oops! Guess she was surprised.

Just one word, OOPS!

Maybe it's me but the story of this story just isn't there.

A good laugh. Thanks.

Hooked

Absolute Rubbish

What a quick and absolutely great one.

There is no way a champagne bottle will break that easily. You have to really smash it against a solid object to get it to shatter like her marriage.

Great story, great ending, thanks!

Holy crap....that's going to be a mess.

A little guided ending, but good the same...4*

Thanks for reading and commenting on my story. It’s been a while since I posted which is why I joined the 750 word challenge. I have several other stories close to completion which I hope to get up this year. Probably not in loving wives, more likely novels/novellas as they are lengthy tales.

The 750 word story is a difficult beast to tame especially when it moves through several scenes like this one. Too many words get ‘wasted’ on description. My first draft was 1100 words. Obviously it means there are places where you have to read between the lines to get gist of what’s going on.

Great to see Harry from VA back. Re timeline Harry, most CBD bars I've been to empty out pretty quickly on Friday afternoon. Many close their doors for the weekend at 8 on Friday night. I did have a sentence spelling that out but it didn't survive the edit process.

Till next time cheers!

CharlieB4

Welcome to your divorce......no calls from her, family or friends begging him to get over it. And the kids won't be so worried about mom's feeling when they ask to live with dad.

Ha. Didn’t see that ending coming! 5 stars from me.

nicely done

Meant to hit 5-stars & Favorite

Surprise indeed! Well done.

Harry, it didn't say the bar closed, just that it emptied out. It likely caters to an after work crowd, who either go home, or out to dinner or to a club. She only had three drinks. It doesn't say how long they were talking, obviously not till 3:00 AM!

gotta love it

‘Nuff said

Great build up and such a sad ending to celebrate her birthday

Great 750 word effort. You kept the "will she," "won't she" tension going well. She ran into a master seducer and paid the price. Because, at heart, she was a slut; harsh, but true.

This is one of those stories that, while complete in itself, BEGS for a Chapter 2; or st least, an epilogue!

Loved it!

She broke every rule known to women who work in the Central Business District.

Also, keys into crotch.

Lastly, the ages don't add up: high school, at least some college, kids old enough to be "out for the night", just turning 40.

@Olfrog.

Where did it say the children were out for the night? Why can’t children under 18 be ‘busy or indisposed? Heard of sleep overs? School camps? And you need a bit of help with maths mate, no reason why a woman of 40 can’t have a 20 year old kid.

Wow.

Now THAT’S how you tell a story in 750 words.

Really needs a part 2

😂

Finally a could be true story with the right ending.

Great story

Hubby calls wondering where she was then she takes the lover to their home? She was going home where her hubby was.. Sorry, but that simple fact doesn't make your story believable and just doesn't jive even if its made up

@anon, there is only 750 words so perhaps you should try reading each one. I think the start of third paragraph “My husband was interstate,” pretty much covers your quibble.

Absolutely Love a story whereby the heroine gets caught with a Dick in her snatch!!! SURPRISE!!! Good one Charlie!!!

I love a story with a happy ending.

Very entertaining story! Good use of the 750 words.

Dramatic; good use of a mere 750 words (always tricky to do). Thank you.

Man!

What a great flash story!

Respect CharlieB4 of work well done.

Top ratings from me.

Always enjoyed this little gem. Also always wished there was a second chapter to it, if only to experience the chaos her entrance caused. Or the aftermath on how her life turned as bad as she felt it was when she cheated.

It's no small task to create a compelling read in a mere 750 words. Most of them end up seriously lacking... this one is terrific.... all the emotions are felt in compact passages.. we know enough to assume the rest and can really FEEL it.

Great story. My 1st thought was “DAMN, THAT is FUCKED UP”!

Good but where did Joe come from? No context

@anon.

Mate, he was a punter in the pub. I had 750 words. It’s a bit hard to build a character profile.

Well witten. 4 stars because the only LW cheating stories get 5 stars from me are those with actual revenge, but that's not a criticism on you - this is a 750 and well-written. If you wrote a sequel that measured up, I'd happily up to 5.

Now she'll be 40 and single.

She'll grow old alone.

Then die.

Her husband will probably be scooped up by one of her single and desperately looking friends. Or maybe an eligible secretary or two?

It's amazing what a good man can get after dumping a bad wife.

A suitcase nuke of an ending!

Hehe. One moment of lustful insanity will cost her everything. Not worth it!