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Click hereGod, I loved her...
Unfortunately all good things must come to an end.
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Unbearable_Desirealmost 2 years agoAuthor@Jackal_Man
Thank you so much for your feedback, you've astutely hit three or four nails on the head!
You've obviously thought about the stereotyping issue more than I, and I value your informed opinion.
Apologies for the oversight with the character name. To be honest, I'm still figuring out how to write and ensure consistency etc. Its a unique challenge (as I'm sure you know) in writing an erotic story. There are very few cognitive tasks that require erotic stimulation in order to complete.
Sometimes the dirty thoughts lead to distraction, I know It's something I need to get better at.
Really glad you understood the purpose of the prologue too. Its the lowest rated story I've posted, but I just think it's crucial for establishing context and I have high hopes for this series. Part 1 is being reviewed now and should be posted in the next day or so.
Hope you enjoy!
U_Desire
jackal_manalmost 2 years agoAs of May 9, 2022 — I’ve read all the tales you’ve submitted so far. What’s interesting is that they’re not the EXACT sub genre of taboo/incest that I usually go for. I don’t think I’ve ever had a white male / Asian female fetish, and (at least for this story) I’m not usually keen on the “step” family part of the taboo; I guess I’m a bit more classically depraved ;)
…But I think it’s a strength of your writing that you’ve managed to spin enjoyable stories with solidly compelling characters and plots despite the stories featuring pairings that aren’t my go-to preference. You have a nice penchant for depicting the “action” of sex scenes, too.
Also, I appreciated your note on stereotypes when you responded to that other commenter’s assumptions. I don’t do any more erotic writing these days, but I had some thoughts on that: 1) we can “pornify” or exaggerate our tastes without having to justify them or label them as problematically stereotypical, 2) as writers we can leverage a stereotype in a way that enhances character and/or conflict, and 3) not every depiction of race and/or gender in writing has to be politically correct (and even if it is/isn’t, a writer is in no way obligated to agree with a reader’s point of view), especially when we know next to nothing about the writer’s actual identity/background.
Aside from that… this installment felt like setup to what the series will actually be about, so I’m looking forward to reading more. Minor note: I think Andrew became “Dan” at one point, so just a heads up. Otherwise, keep up the great work.
